You tell me you love me
but yet you can't show it.
You tell me you care
but how do I know it?
I'm slipping slowly away,
too far to reach.
I hold out my hand
for you to grab.
Nothing,
nothing is there.
I'm screaming to you
on the way down.
Singing my heartbreak
as loud as i can.
But you don't hear it.
I'm only forgotten.
Submitted: January 28, 2010
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great. really great. simple yet still emotional. Cold almost...yet still vunerable (i ramble) not over the top but way better than a little good (see) i like the rhyme and prose i give you....91/100 i wanna see the angry you
Tue, February 2nd, 2010 3:03amYeah, the simplicity seems to make it more powerful. I'm sorry you ever had to experience whatever heartbreak that was - just by reading this I can guess how awful it was. :(
You're a very good writer, though.
It flows very well! I love the poem :)
Fri, March 19th, 2010 1:45amFacebook Comments
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your actually a really good writer. I like it. The formatting made it a little hard to read but everyone has formatting problems. :)
Fri, January 29th, 2010 9:50pmAuthor
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thanks (:
Sat, January 30th, 2010 6:10pmand i fixed it