Singing Heartbreak

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic

Just a little something I wrote in a a time of heartbreak.

You tell me you love me
but yet you can't show it.
You tell me you care
but how do I know it?
I'm slipping slowly away,
too far to reach.
I hold out my hand
for you to grab.
Nothing,
nothing is there.
I'm screaming to you
on the way down.
Singing my heartbreak
as loud as i can.
But you don't hear it.
I'm only forgotten.


Submitted: January 28, 2010

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makaylaluvsyoo13

your actually a really good writer. I like it. The formatting made it a little hard to read but everyone has formatting problems. :)

Fri, January 29th, 2010 9:50pm

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thanks (:
and i fixed it

Sat, January 30th, 2010 6:10pm

Atton Brown

great. really great. simple yet still emotional. Cold almost...yet still vunerable (i ramble) not over the top but way better than a little good (see) i like the rhyme and prose i give you....91/100 i wanna see the angry you

Tue, February 2nd, 2010 3:03am

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thank you (:
and i actually have some angry stuff, i just haven't published it yet

Tue, February 2nd, 2010 2:44pm

Lucciola

Yeah, the simplicity seems to make it more powerful. I'm sorry you ever had to experience whatever heartbreak that was - just by reading this I can guess how awful it was. :(

You're a very good writer, though.

Wed, February 3rd, 2010 3:49am

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thank you (:

Wed, February 3rd, 2010 4:42pm

taylornicole

It flows very well! I love the poem :)

Fri, March 19th, 2010 1:45am

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thank you :D

Fri, March 19th, 2010 10:42am

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