Flee'

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic

Telling a partner to do one basically.

 

Don't fucking touch me
keep the fuck out my personal space
warning you once time and one time only
To get out and keep out my face.
Take your attitude else where
along with your stories and lies
save your energy I really couldn’t care
you can kiss our memory goodbyes.
Take a hint and do one
learn it’s best to just let go
and with you I am done
I don't even want to know.
Back the fuck away from me
learn and understand your place
try one more time and I can guarantee
I plant one across your beautiful face.
The word “love” comes easy to you
that word you just abuse
don't talk to me or try and touch me too
because I will plain fucking refuse.
Find some other mug to follow
I’m going my own way from here
so on you go and take toe
my decision has been made clear.
Time has been wasted playing dumb
your time is well overdue
too long I spent under the thumb
respecting and obeying you.
Don’t fucking touch me
don’t try settling me down to talk
we never have never will agree
you never were my rock.
This is not me and I wont continue to stand for it
I see now I let things really slide
I’m sick of you so pack up all your shit
you don’t get to decide.

 


-JiDonnelly’
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Submitted: March 29, 2012

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DopeyTomlinson

Love It!
This Would Make A Perfect Verse!
Strong Flow, Strong Feelings!
Helfi Babe x

Fri, March 30th, 2012 3:53pm

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n'aww thank you dopes(:
Lovely piece of feedback.

-JiDonnelly'

Fri, March 30th, 2012 9:03am

Kitaramitsui

Hmm.. I like this. You can feel the raw emotion in it and it flows smoothly. Very easy to read and follow. Very well done :)

Fri, March 30th, 2012 4:13pm

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Thank you very much.
I'm grateful.

-JiDonnelly'

Sat, March 31st, 2012 8:04am

Ian Dawn

Strength, and raw emotive tallent flows from those fingers once more. The narative flows thick and fast and just when you think its flowing nicely you throw in:
DONT FUCKING TOUCH ME
just to thow me of ballance and pick up again asusual great internal emotive work.

Wed, April 11th, 2012 2:08am

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Emm wow Ian, Thanks.
Thank you so so much your comments and positive feedback blow me away everytime, I hope its not too raw.

-Ji'

Sat, May 5th, 2012 7:12pm

Darklady

This is an angry poem definitely , full of harsh words and emotions. Not really my type but it's a good poem nevertheless :) ...

Sat, May 19th, 2012 3:31pm

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So you have said:/
I really don't mind your comments but each one mentions that my writing is not your style I don't understand as to why you would continue reading, thanks for the support, nevertheless(:..

-JiDonnelly'

Sat, May 19th, 2012 9:56am

matty6666

I love your stuff! The pure anger in this. My favourite word is fuck, and you use it so well to display angst and anger here!

Some poems rhyme and can feel robotic, but yours flows like your own dialogue, well done!

Using Fuck in the first line just instantly hooked me into this! xx

Thu, July 12th, 2012 4:16pm

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n'aww thank you!!
most don't really like my work when it includes too much swearing.
I really love when someone relates or has similar taste in urban poetry so yeah, most of my work has swearing and anger involved.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
I am very grateful (:

-JiDonnelly'

Fri, July 13th, 2012 4:52am

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