The Weakness in Me

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

This one is for the future. I feel the brightness in the power of something deeper in a good soul. It is the weakness in me.

I look across the crashing blue of the ocean

Smelling the salt in the crystal blue

And feeling the wonders of the water

In the water and the sand beneath my feet

And I spot a rainbow in the horizon

I so wish I could touch...

I sit posed like a sculpture by Rodin

And I am thinking of the horizon off in the distance

It will always be ahead of me

I can hear the Dolphin’s cry

For the songs sang from soft lips

And I know

I have found a bright star

Alone in the sparkling rough facets

Of diamonds in the darkness of a mine

Hoping it will provide enough light to guide my way

to the rainbow

and I smileand I smile

I turn to gaze as the dance finally unfolds for me

It was true what old artist’s believe

As the beauty of Venus

Sang of something deeper to my thoughts

Breaking the stale air as I hunger

And I can smell a flower

It is the weakness in me

Submitted: April 26, 2012

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I love this, it is so lovely 'i smile, and i smile'
the dance 'unfolds' etc..
and i also very much like that you refer to your soul as the 'weakness in me'
it reminds me that we have to be that opening, giving up what we considered strong to feel the 'presence'
of our selves; of the earth/sky/waters....

what's more so is the fact that you place yourself off the future with a promise of being fullfilled ; bright stars/diamonds/smiles/beauty*.. and your voice here shows gratitude and acceptance of the near future.. in my opinion it is how we make our own personal futures! Yay! :-)
best wishes to you jm!

Thu, May 3rd, 2012 2:31pm


Best wishes for you air as well. I was glad to see you back on here, by the way. You seemed to vanish for a bit. I will be checking your page for more material. I cannot wait. I enjoy your calmness.

Sat, May 5th, 2012 3:42am


I love the way this has been put together by you - I share many of your weaknesses. Your weakness is to be soft, inspired, calm, attune to nature and the world around you and that gentleness is something far more spiritual and strong and you capture this in a very alluring poem.

Fri, May 4th, 2012 3:07am


anna2again...I like saying that...Thank you for your writing. You interpreted my poem well with your response. I wanted to capture gentleness, love, and serenity with this poem. I wanted to display a weakness proudly...

Sat, May 5th, 2012 3:45am


I still love this piece each time I read it

Sat, June 30th, 2012 6:17pm


This makes me happy more than the words can write themself. Your comments are always first rate! :)

Sat, June 30th, 2012 11:21am

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