this is what she's gunna be
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Hey dad? why not? why do you answer no?
its only a pricing, it will go away
so don't flip out, i'm fourteen i live my life for me
Mom, dont scream its only a tattoo
i'm fifteen i have my own dreams
so don't trytoo change me
HEY world! look at me i am finally sixteen! i am who i want to be
my parent's say no, the world hates to know
but i am me, it might not be in my gene's
but i am amazing don't try and hurt me
Hey mom, dad. Please don't hate me...
i'm sorry but the condom broke
i'm eight weeks....
i still sont know what its going to be
this is what she's gunna be... i'll be looking at me
Submitted: November 20, 2011
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Julya,
Sat, November 26th, 2011 2:15pmFor your readers to believe your writing must be true is a real compliment to your writing abilities.
Again, spelling. Pricing should have been piercing.
"Don't try and change me". Although conversational, it is correct as "Don't try to change me". Do you see how "and" makes no sense in this context?
Overall, you language skills have improved. Your storytelling is outstanding!
Georgie
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yeah i'm sorry my English isn't so good, i'm kind of from the trailor park... thing. so you can call me a redneck, my spelling is bad too... yeah... that was your random peice of useles info you will learn about me tee-hee
Sat, November 26th, 2011 6:53am