Angelo & Mackenzie
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Book by: justmekass
And while you're reading, keep in mind everyone has their own secrets.
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Submitted: November 26, 2011
Submitted: November 26, 2011
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Hi, I just saw your reading request and followed it only to discover that this piece of writing hooked me up!!! Good use of words and directions. I like your style of writing and the plot already looks promising. But then, there is a little problem. I hope you don't mind if I identify that to you. I guess more paragraph breaks are required in your writing.
Like, when you write a dialogue, you can start a new paragraph. It will become more readable for the user.
And just in case, you have not known yet, you need not comment again to reply to the comments, you have an optional box for the replies in the comments section.
I hope I have not offended you by saying the above things, but I really do like the start of this story and I will be glad if you keep me updated. And not to mention, but don't leave the story in between, please continue it till the end. :)
hmm u have a very unique way of writing but u need to be carefully as having everything clumped together like you do can be difficult to read. Try having a new line after each person speaks as it will make it so much easier to read. Check out my book and see how I do it if you want. Other than that it seems really good and i cant wait to see what happens between her and angelo. KMU??
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