THE ANGEL TOOK HER...

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The kid is quite extraordinary. The child likes to be with another kid and hardly be with her family. the change in behavior perplexes the family.

“Lunch is ready, Cathy.” Catherine’s mother Mrs. Marshall called out her kinder garden girl, she was playing in her room. She never liked her parents or her older brother to peek in when she plays. She preferred playing alone with her toys in her room.

  Her mother opened the door and saw Cathy was sitting on the window sill with a Barbie doll in her hand. She was talking and abruptly stopped when she sensed her mother’s presence. Her mother frowned, for a moment she felt she saw two kids an another look she saw a halo over her child’s head. “Cathy?” Mrs. Marshall called her again. “Coming mama.” The cheerful brown haired girl said. She held on her mother’s long recently manicured fingers. Cathy’s mother jerked. She felt as though someone pushed a hot syringe on her fingers where Catherine held on. Cathy still caressing her doll with other hand did not seems to be noticing anything amiss.

Jerome came runningwith his football through kitchen door. He skidded and the ball slipped from his hand. He was quite perplexed to see his little sister holding the ball in her dainty fingers. “You are late. I have told you many a times don’t run in the home. You may get hurt” Mrs. Marshall said. “I’m sorry.” Jerome said still not taking his eyes off from his sister. Jerome liked his sister before she began to show changes in her behavior. She spoke perfect language. She could run in speed which was not usual with the kids of her age. She slept alone in her room at night but when Jerome was of her age he made his mother sleep beside him at least till he was asleep. She was exception. She is jovial and funny yet something extra ordinary.

It was a summer day. The sun shone in the sky bright and gold. The breeze was warm and burned everything which came in its way. Cathy and Jerome were upstairs playing and their parents had a visitor Mr. and Mrs. Gregory, they came to Marshall’s family for every small reason. They arrived at quarter to 3.00 in the afternoon and left Marshall Family exhausted with the on going talks. “Look, jerry.” Cathy called her brother. He was busy playing on his video game. She was standing in front of the mirror and was trying out different dresses of her mother’s old tops. This was usual of her part; she did this and always showed his brother and asked how she looked. What surprised him was the reflection of her in the mirror.

He could see another person in the mirror with the halo. He raced down to tell his parents what he found about his sister. His father of course did not believed a word but his mother had a doubt. She made Cathy to show her outfits on the mirror but they couldn’t find any absurd vision.  The next morning, when Mrs. Marshall went to wake her daughter she found a blue mark on her ankle. She couldn’t find the source and it was spreading. For doctors, the ankles looked spot less and healthy. But it had spread on her tiny foot; it was glittering blue as though it had no blood circulation.

  It was dinner time and all the family members were used to the visiting angel with halo. The angel did not talk to anybody just smile was the answer for all the questions.  More and more days past; she looked like the angel but she did not have wings or halo. “The time has come” the first words spoken by the angel was so childish but mesmerizing. Cathy and the angel stood holding hands and was about to depart. Cathy’s eyes were filled with tears; her parents could have stopped her from going. “Please, don’t go. I…” “No, let her go. She belongs to them. She will forget us” Mr. Marshall said.  Catherine departed, disappeared never to be seen again.

 

 ANNETTE RAJU


Submitted: October 11, 2012

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143Alodia

lyk !!

Sat, October 20th, 2012 4:59am

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thanks :)

Fri, October 19th, 2012 10:34pm

The Introvert

Interesting. Very deep and creative. Is her brother named Jerome or Jerry? Or does she have two brothers?

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 1:34am

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she calls jerome as jerry :P

Sun, October 21st, 2012 10:38pm

The Introvert

Oh, I get it!

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 8:51pm

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:)

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 10:16pm

Coralie

This was a really good story! I liked it! But why did the angel come to take her? Did she die or something?

Wed, October 24th, 2012 8:44pm

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she was a part of the angel group
i will soon edit it. thank you. :)

Wed, October 24th, 2012 11:31pm

Vampire17

I love it!

Fri, October 26th, 2012 6:44pm

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:)

Sat, October 27th, 2012 1:00am

LilLoCksea

Heartbreaking.......but i do love the story line!!! anything to do with angels im game for!!!=D
Good Job!!!*

Thu, November 1st, 2012 2:51pm

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thanks a ton!

Thu, November 1st, 2012 8:01am

Spyguy

I like your ideas, your underlying story line, & the creativity in the writing...it becomes obvious that English is not your first language, that's not a problem, but it surfaces in grammatical errors... If you really want to get better, have a teacher friend, or a native speaking well versed persongive you some ehlp with simple little spelling & gramatical things & you'll fly higher with the comments of praise. Hope this is helpful, not trying to make you feel bad at all. You have a good piece here & some very minor ajustments will make it GREAT.

Fri, November 2nd, 2012 9:26am

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:)

Fri, November 2nd, 2012 3:07am

DeadLuck

I really like it and I feel like it reminded me of a movie and also when I finished my CHP. Book Chp. 1 part 1 of the Unknown Warrior ,Pls read it and hint like .. And Keep on working on you imagines and be more creative and thrilling ..LOve Combussed Telling Story..

Sat, November 10th, 2012 9:39pm

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thank you!!

Sat, November 10th, 2012 10:59pm

Elizabeth Smit

This is so sad..but it was really good! Loved it

Sun, November 11th, 2012 5:36pm

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thank you!!

Sun, November 11th, 2012 8:41pm

Imagine Words

OMG that is so sad, why did she turn into an angel ???

Tue, November 13th, 2012 8:40am

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i wanted that part to be filled by the readers itself so did not mention about it.
keep thinking. :)
thank you! for reading.

Wed, November 14th, 2012 6:30am

animefreak77L

Wow this was a really good story, the plot is different but I sorta wished it would have been longer. I love the fact that it's sad I love sad stories :) thanks for asking me to read

Fri, November 16th, 2012 7:43am

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thank you!!

Fri, November 16th, 2012 5:17am

Kalika997

This is good writing, but there are quite a few grammatical errors in there, like "dint" should be "didn't" and other small things like that. While disagreeing with the 'angel' perception, I must say that was a good piece, keep up the good work!

Fri, November 16th, 2012 9:17am

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thank you!!

Fri, November 16th, 2012 5:16am

Audrey Wilson

Nice :)

Fri, November 16th, 2012 5:19pm

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thank you!!

Sun, November 18th, 2012 8:35am

DGNAForever

That was sad, but beautiful, at the same time. I like it.

Fri, November 16th, 2012 5:56pm

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thank you!!

Sun, November 18th, 2012 8:35am

Carefulx

That was sad but it's a great story. :D

Fri, November 16th, 2012 10:33pm

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thank you!

Sun, November 18th, 2012 8:34am

Miss A

aww that is so sad but hope Cathy gets to stay happily with the angels .. but why did the angels take Cathy away ...
anyways you have a good potential to start writing a novel ....
Good job :)

Fri, November 16th, 2012 10:58pm

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thank you!
as i said before she is a part of angel

Sun, November 18th, 2012 8:33am

Emo dark child

I am honest when I say this is very diffrent story but I really enjoyed it well done!!! :)

Sat, December 1st, 2012 7:40am

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thank you!

Sat, December 1st, 2012 12:26am

ValeriyaPonomar

Awe sad but happy, just like many said above. I look the part-angel thing you had here, very interesting! Gets a like from me!

Wed, February 20th, 2013 5:21pm

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Thank you!

Wed, February 20th, 2013 6:49pm

Naan

well uhhh you are very creative there's no question in that.
but I really wish you would edit this one because it has the potential to be something great.
there are a lot of tiny mistakes that you need to be careful about
also, I really wish you would have said more before you introduced the angel. it came all of a sudden
but I really liked the idea. you're brilliant

Tue, March 19th, 2013 7:08pm

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thank you

Wed, March 20th, 2013 7:03am

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