Poem by: Kathryn
Submitted: July 10, 2008
He kindly whispered, time is of the essence.
Well, if you take you must give.
My price is far too much.
What would you be willing to sacrifice?
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Brian Peza Perrins
Powerful Kathryn, a commitment too far I would say.
I can agree. I believe the dominating voice in this one is naivety. Thanks for the comment, as always.
Wow, very odd poem. I can't quite get my head around it! I love the very different style. I'm not sure what it's about though, two lovers arguing about commitment? Or is it just one person thinking through two sides of an argument. Perhaps that is the beauty, you can look at pieces like this in more than one way.
Well it was supposed to be sort of a deal between one lover who wants "this" to last forever and someone (probably interpreted as the Devil or, perhaps, God) who can give him/her the request he/she is looking for. Each line goes back and forth in the conversation with the negotiation and the ending (as to whether or not he/she obtains the ends he/she wanted) is left open to the reader's imagination. It also makes you wonder why he/she needs to make the deal in the first place. Does the other lover not want it to happen forever? Is the other lover sick/dying? Are there circumstances beyond their control and this is a last-ditch effort to maintain what they have? I hope with this new information you can see a new angle and answer some of your questions. Let me know if this brings up more that you want answered. :)
Thanks, as always, for the comment.
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