Broken Me

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Work in progress. I was lost and hopeless when I started writing this. But don't worry...I'm fine now ;) I'm actually not too sure where the hell I was going with this, but I'd like to do something with it. We'll see...........

The end
No more
The closing of the door
 
Missing key
Broken me
Ever different from before
 
Slowing breath
Heavy lids
My heart aching once more
 
Fade to black
Dreams attack
Then wash away at the shore


Submitted: February 25, 2009

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Classy Peach

Oh no no no no.
Must keep going. This is too short.
Your very creative and brilliant mind
can make this much livelier.

Good stuff.

Thu, February 26th, 2009 12:07am

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it's terribly short......and pointless. not sure what I'm going to do with it or why I even posted it. something will come of it

Wed, February 25th, 2009 4:28pm

Midnight Rose

It is short, but not pointless. I think we've all felt this way sometime. I liked it. But you can add to it someday if you like. Kudos! :)

Thu, February 26th, 2009 12:20pm

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thanks!
definitely want to add to this!

Wed, April 22nd, 2009 7:01am

Night Write

WOW!!! This was short and sharp! I agree with Classy Peach, this one is brilliant and should be longer!!! Very catchy, nice rythm.

Thu, February 26th, 2009 2:21pm

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thanks for reading. still trying to figure out what to do and where to go with this one.

Wed, April 22nd, 2009 6:56am

SadGirl2012

i like it hope you think of more lines 2 add 2 the poem

Thu, October 15th, 2009 9:29pm

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thanks for reading. this is something that has been simmering for awhile. lol. I can't even remember what was going through my head when I started writing it, but hopefully I'll figure out what to do with it - or at least parts of it! thanks for stopping by!

Thu, October 15th, 2009 2:37pm

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