Headlights

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

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Light residue

Behind me -

coming from you

In my future

lies your past

Shining bright

and coming fast

The road ahead -

it has a curve

"Slow down" you warn

"Try not to swerve"

I'll learn on my own

My pride in check

So I stray from the light

In the dark, I wreck

Directions you gave

Precise and clear

But I threw them away

So I could steer


Submitted: May 14, 2008

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Alice Oiseau

ooo yes i can actually decipher every bit of this poem. i understood it perfectly. i'm not one to really "throw out the directions". i'm a good teen and i listen to my parents... for the most part. but of course i've had those days when i'm feeling rebellious and just want my independence so i do things MY way. and thats when i "stray from the light" and things go wrong and its quite a car wreck! we pick up the pieces though and make things better though by learning from our mistakes. :)
lovely poem. a favorite!

Thu, May 15th, 2008 2:33am

wikhaiinn

oh yeah... this one took my attention... cool.. I agree to what tweety bird says XD oh I mean Alice... this is lovely :)

Thu, May 15th, 2008 1:27pm

Author
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Thank you :)

Thu, May 15th, 2008 6:33am

Paws

Again, you've got an awesome extended metaphor thing. It's really good again. I can pretty much relate to every word of this poem. I think the extended metaphor thing makes a subject that a lot of people can relate to even more understandable. I love it!
Paws

Sat, May 31st, 2008 3:23am

controverse

Very nice poem. The metaphor of driving really represents your theme well :)

It's something everyone goes through, no? You don't listen to your parents when you're young because you either think they're stupid or you want to be independent, and later you realize how wise and right they actually were?

Keep up the good work

Thu, June 12th, 2008 3:55pm

viper

You're a goood poet.I liked this one.I liked the rhyming alot.It was very well put together.Nicely done.

Wed, February 25th, 2009 11:11pm

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Thanks! Glad you liked it :)

Wed, February 25th, 2009 3:13pm

Midnight Rose

yes! Happened to me and I kick myself in the butt all the time, but that's life and that's how we learn. Only wish my children learn too. :) Loved it...

Thu, February 26th, 2009 12:22pm

Author
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glad you like!
your children will learn - even though it may not be in the way you had hoped ;) as I've said before, we learn more from our mistakes than our successes!
thank you for reading and commenting! it is well appreciated!

Wed, April 22nd, 2009 7:00am

Chimeron

lol, I never really came to appreciate my parents so much until I had children of my own. But this poem really brings that teenage struggle to light. It is a very difficult time for both teen and parent to have to watch and learn to let go and allow their children to make their own mistakes. We want so much to keep them safe from harm.

Thu, February 26th, 2009 4:11pm

Gift Of Noni

Katiedid,

Nice poem. It is often difficult for us to follow directions and stay on the path of light. We do tend to focus on the fact that we are steering our lives and disregard the "back seat drivers".

As Alinis Morisette said "It's the good advice, that you just can't take"

Great Job!

Tim

Wed, March 4th, 2009 12:03pm

Author
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Hey!
Thanks for reading. Glad you liked!

Wed, April 22nd, 2009 5:38am

palewriter

Very clever! I like the way you chose the car theme. I also could decipher the lines and you relayed your meaning well. Very good. Thanks for becoming a fan as well Katiedid.

Fri, October 16th, 2009 10:39pm

Author
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thanks for reading! for some reason, I like to use metaphors when I write.

Fri, January 22nd, 2010 7:35am

jwb

... I like it. Again a very good poem.

Sat, October 17th, 2009 8:00pm

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