Read and you will see what it may be

Wait.......

He said to me.

Wait.....

For it can't be

What I'm waiting for

From a distance shore

Not knowing that I would be asking  more.

*  *  ***

What......

I said to him

But......

for it is slim

There wasn't enough for me or him.

*****  *

For here we are

sitting near but far

What might look good with a candy bar.

**  **  **  **

But what can we do

When it's just us two

Want to have a feast

But it's just one piece.


Submitted: June 28, 2008

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Kavanya

Let me know what you think. Me and my sisters sometimes write things that come to our mind and sometimes put it into a song or a poem. I just wrote this because it's what came into my head.

Sat, June 28th, 2008 3:03pm

Spicy Brown

I thought he didn't want her to go anywhere and then I thought about food. You got me there with the title. "One Piece" I just kept saying that in my head until it hit me. They was probably at the beach by themselves and had one piece of chicken leg or wing or whatever food they have and she wanted the last piece. Thats a good one. I like it. It is an interesting poem.

Tue, July 1st, 2008 4:33am

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Well, i try to throw people off a little but yea, you sum it up. They were at a beach alone where no one was around.

Thu, July 3rd, 2008 6:23pm

Verlande

LOL.....Its funny and cute I liked it..........

Sun, July 6th, 2008 5:00am

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Thank you.

Sun, July 6th, 2008 7:35pm

KytrisVemidethMedera

lol I really like this poem, reading and writting poem sis something i really enjoy.

Thu, July 31st, 2008 5:00am

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Thank you.

Thu, July 31st, 2008 10:35pm

ReganFinch

Hey Kavanya :) I love the tone of this poem. It is unique and it suits your style of writing very well. I also like how you phrase your lines.

"From a distance shore

Not knowing that I would be asking more,"

is just a great line that really shows that you have an intense grasp on the poetic language. I look forward to more! Take care, Regan

Sat, August 2nd, 2008 9:40pm

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Thank you. I try my best. I will post some more poems in the future.

Sun, August 3rd, 2008 3:21pm

viper

That's really good.It's hard to share when you only have one pice.I love the rhyming in this.Really good job.Keep it up.

Mon, August 4th, 2008 2:35pm

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Ture. Thank you.

Wed, August 6th, 2008 6:13pm

Kshitij Sharma

Ha ha. That was fun. Very different. I loved it. Now I want a candy bar :-)

Tue, August 5th, 2008 10:06am

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Thanks.

Wed, August 6th, 2008 6:12pm

kimmysweetie08

Funny... Really great :) I love it!

Fri, October 12th, 2012 1:34pm

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Thanks

Sat, October 13th, 2012 8:45am

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