Alexandra

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic

Be grateful it's not you. When life is tough, remember there is always someone below you that would kill to be exactly where YOU are right now.

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Alexandra Grey. When you look at this boy, you see a fifteen year old who has shunned himself from the world. His unkempt copper hair, is brushed over his eyes and feathering his cheeks; his face is shadowed beneath a black cap; his body is concealed in baggy jeans and a heavy cotton jacket.
He marches into his house, head bent down, his gait hasty.
'Hey honey! How was school?' His moms uninterested cheerfullness implied that she didn't exactly expect an answer.
'Yeah, fine, whatever,' he grunted.
'How are your friends?'
'Cool'. I don't have any.
'That's so nice to hear love. Lunch?'
'Not hungry,' he mumbled.
'What's that on your face?'
'Paint,' he rushed into his room, shoved the bolt in place and slid down to the floor, knocking his head into the wall.
He catches glimpse of his face in the mirror, dripping with blood. His eyes is protruding, dramatic hues of black and blue. His nose, his lip, is ruptured. His skin is torn, where they raked a blade through.
School. Hell.
They were killing him.

Be grateful...


Submitted: March 12, 2011

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sinaid kincaid

Very thought provoking. Yeah, so typical parents are to busy to parent. And when is anyone going to realise that school is hell......:((

Sat, March 12th, 2011 3:57pm

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School is hell, but you have to be strong enough to deal with it. I would think the most important thing is standing up to people that want to bring you down. Thanks for commenting. :)

Sun, March 13th, 2011 12:33am

saoirse989

damn, bad luck boy! even tho this was short you got the msg across very accurately and clearlyy i like your style :D oh, just a kinda small point: alexandra is a girl's name, but alexander is a boy's name - just to make sure you knew that, sorry if you did already :P keep it up :)

Sat, March 12th, 2011 5:29pm

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yup I knew that, but I read a book once and there was a boy called Alexandra...so I figured I'd use it too. :D. Thanks a lot!

Sun, March 13th, 2011 12:35am

Kurlz Basheld

Wow, that was really good. Poor kid!

Mon, March 14th, 2011 11:00pm

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I know, poor kid.

Tue, March 15th, 2011 3:21am

bello idris

the world has turn around , so anything can happen

Tue, March 15th, 2011 3:37am

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very true. thanks for commenting! :D.

Tue, March 15th, 2011 3:22am

arun

Oh dear what can I say? Your words always are laden with a powerful message that sends whips to some category of the reader. Now it is the parents! Khano you rock. I can understand... Feeling sorry for that fictional character...

Fri, June 24th, 2011 2:16pm

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Aw, feeling sorry? I guess he encompasses a lot of the situations that many young teenagers are faced with. Thank you once again for such an uplifting comment.

Sat, June 25th, 2011 8:56am

GuruGuy

It appears you have completely devoured the book (quran). Hahahahaha I say that as a metaphor (Oh wait! You don't get it?)

This short story is indeed "short", but the message seems to play out in an implicit form as you nicely described the character's current plight (depression?).

There's one suggestion: as much as I like the fact that you keep saying "be grateful," including the phrase at the end of this story makes it less of a short story but more like, say, article? I don't know, maybe i'm getting this wrong. My point is, the story itself should be enough (hopeful for everyone reading) to make the reader understand exactly what is expected from him/her.

Sorry for the above criticism...I deserve punishment? hahahah.

Nicely done, again! Keep up the great work and one day you'll be a successful author. In other words, you'll be the "light". I'll leave it to you to figure out what I mean by that.

Khano, KMU as soon as possible. If you don't, i'll bring a machete and find you...online. :) Cheers!!

Mon, June 27th, 2011 6:36am

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You are most probably right. It is CONSTRUCTIVE. I need it. :)... I will alter that a bit. Thanks for picking it out. I just cannot get over this enormous lot of comments that are just...wow!

Thu, June 30th, 2011 3:25pm

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