Deadly shadow

Super strong start, filled with action. Your writing is easy on the eyes making it easy to follow and enjoy. Your descriptions are also spot on and match the tempo with ease. I already love your girl, and I can't wait to read her kick ass and taking names. Brilliant start!

Mate that was a wonderful read but I'm not going to hesitate to point out your flaws. For starters, you're introduction barely featured any correct use of grammar. The language could've featured vocabulary from the Webster's adult dictionary, instead you decided to get an estranged eight year old to type it out for you. I'm not one to boss around, but the prologue/chapter one could've featured something racy off the bat. [ After all you think of your work as a romance novel]. I'm saying this not because I'm a jerk or anything like that, instead I want someone to give me their professional opinion; be it complimentary or critical. It just has to be as detailed as the one I've written now. So feel free to drop by my page, and read the incredibly long sample I've published.
















P.s I'm only kidding. I had no intention to be very critical. It was amazing and I only said those rude things to capture you're attention.

Thought I would pause from writing and do some reading. Love how this starts out - it immediately drew me in. I'm really excited to see where this goes!

I loved the story and I'm so glad there is more to come. The characters all seem to fit in somehow. Great job on this story, I will be looking forward to your next book.

So sad about his family situation. But I am glad they retogether.

Poor Eris, trying to adjust to a normal life that she is not used to. I hope Meg comes around soon, she sure can give a cold shoulder. Sebastian is awake, YAY!!!

They will have to get a bigger house before long, LOL I love how welcoming/helpful the group is. I hope Megan comes around soon, and I hope Sebastian gets well soon. I love this story and the people in it.

Oh definitely. I think Eris is cool headed enough that she wouldn't actually gun for Megs and it would probably be Megs throwing the first hit or two. But like you said, you had plenty of avenues that you could have gone with this that it could have gone on and on. It was the right place to stop it for now...and in the mean time I can just watch reruns of Sebastian on his two shows to get my fix! lol

Ahhh all caught up and poof it's done... No seriously I do think it was a good stopping point. They are out, the what's next is the next part of their story. Granted I wouldn't have said no to one more Mmm Sebastian scene, but hey...he is topless in this chapter! PMSL No in seriousness, I think maybe it will be Sebastian that gets through to Meg after all. Like not completely because there is obviously some issues that can't be solved by having those two duke it out...bit of an unfair advantage for Eris really, but maybe Megs is seeing that through all of this all that matter was Sebastian. And I think it tells the oldest tale...that you can't really help who you end up falling for. Both Meg and Sebastian fell for the impossible and are trying to make it work and so far they are. Megs and Kain, regardless of what they have talked about or not, are in a good place and they are happy and Sebastian is right, Eris deserves that too, especially given her back story. Eris and Sebastian are in a good place too, Eris just needs to adjust to a different pace of life and how to expand her comfort zone, because no one under that roof is going to turn their back on her now, even Meg with the issues there. Anyways, I am seriously rambling, but yeah...I loved this one Kirst. Seriously phenomenal job on it, with the balance of everything, the depth in character...it was seriously fantastic!!! xoxo

I swear these two are perfection. You strip away everything else and it's just them. This was such a powerful chapter, for being little more than them talking with each other, but it was the emotions in it that got me. Risky and foolish or not, Eris was going to do anything by any means necessary to ensure that he lived and I don't think it's anger as much as it is frustration, Sebastian sees that she was injured doing this, but there was little other option, like she told him. Neither of them could really handle losing the other and again that's what makes them so perfect for each other. Sebastian is always going to know how to calm her down, or what she needs, he is that voice of sanity for her. No matter what, they will always have each other...and that little throwback to the beach in Greece...thank you for little memory flashes! LOL No seriously I loved everything about this chapter, like I said, it was just perfect for lack of a better word!! xoxo

Again, I won't rehash, but Megs needs to stow the attitude towards Eris or it's going to get ugly. Eris is trying to be civil from what I can guess and with her already feeling out of place and injured...which means pain, that tolerance she is holding to won't hold out for long. Just my thoughts from what we've seen of Eris so far. But I did love the little pissing match between the Kain and Eris, not that I think that helped matters any with Megs, it was funny to see even Lyra take a complete stranger's side in this argument! lol It honestly would be a death match between those two if it ever came to that and here's hoping that it doesn't. And I'm glad someone was able to get through to Eris to eat and stay strong so that she could be there for Sebastian. And poor Tricia, just the mention of that pig upsets her, but at least he is gone and while Eris may never completely, truly understand what it means to Tricia to have that man gone, actually what it means to all of them, I love that she didn't know how to accept the thank yous she was getting and that last few moments, when she enters the room and Sebastian calls to her...I love it...seriously girl...it's like a sculpture of metal and paper...a perfect mixture of these intense moments mixed with the delicate emotional ones and it's fantastic!! xoxo

It's funny because Evie a lot of the time seems to be more of a voice of reason than anyone else. Like maybe she gets it and honestly her comments to Megs needed to be said and it's probably safer that it was from Evie and Eris. Eris is blunt and she's not in the business of making friends, like she said, or soothing people...so Megs and her chip filled shoulder might want to watch it a bit. I get that she feels intimidated by Eris, honestly who wouldn't, but through all of it...bringing Kain in, dealing with Casper the first time and even ending up here, it wasn't to try and get Kain or anyone else, it was all about Sebastian and I think right now Megs is forgetting that. Not to bag on her or anything, but like Evie said, once this family takes you in, you are family...even if you were a stray or a waif. Honestly it's like the damn marking of the territory happening and I don't see Megs suddenly backing off unless Kain really steps in, but still I get the feeling there is going to be residual tension with these two characters. Not something that would be good for anyone involved. Eris wouldn't have second thoughts about sticking it to Megs, Kain would have no second thoughts to sticking it to Eris and the whole thing goes up in flames, so it needs to be dealt with. On the other hand, I loved the warm reception from everyone else, especially Tricia...gotta love that girl!! I loved the whole chapter actually...It's interesting to see this dynamic meet with Eris' dynamic and how it will play out...if that makes sense!? lol xoxo

I loved it Kirst!!!Even though it's up in the air, the what now that Eris is concerned about, but truly if they have weathered this, Eris and Sebastian can weather anything. And I stand by my thoughts, Eris is definitely the toughest one you've written so far. I'm not sure any of the others can hold a candle to her, not to put down the other females you written, but damn, she literally takes a beating and keeps going. And damn I forgot just how testy Megs can, especially on the medical side of things, but medic or not, she might want to tread softly with this one. The way Eris is trained, like she said, she would have never called in reinforcements if she thought for a second she could have handled it on her own. It wasn't so much that she wanted to call Kain in, but that she had to, because again like she said, Sebastian is her everything and she wasn't going to risk a damn thing going wrong with getting him out safely and alive. I think Kain and Megs need to have a talk. There is definitely a lot that he didn't tell her about his life, and I'm sure there are parts he will never fully be able to tell her. I can understand that and perhaps that is where really Eris is lucky, she can talk to Sebastian if she needs to, but for now...I just like that last little bit there, they are together and safe. xoxo

Caged animal says it all honestly. This is all absurdly new to Eris, this isn't the kind of setting or anything she is use to, if that makes sense and when you add in seeing just how battered Sebastian is and the wounds she herself has sustained and a fever... yeah...it's a recipe for certain disaster if Eris is pushed too much. I get that Meg is a medic, a damn good one at that obviously with the training she has had and the obvious flow of injuries to treat, even before this, but hun...I love you, but getting on Eris' testy side might not be a good idea. I wouldn't say that she feels a kinship or friendship really towards Kain or anyone else in that room, with the exception of Sebastian, but she is intelligent enough to know that they are helping. But at the same time, that friendliness doesn't matter if she feels backed into a corner. Yeah...so no anesthesia for this girl. Eris is tough, that's no doubt, but for once this isn't stubborn pride coming out in an effort to not look weak, this would literally be lethal to her...so let's go ahead and find a way to get her off those meds... Anyways, I am once again so relieved that she is there and they are both relatively safe!! yay...okay next chapter! xoxo

Okay this is where this one leaves off for a while there is so much more for them to come but I've been on this for a while and I don't like to burn out and make a story something i'm not happy with
thank you for reading and commenting xoxoxo Kirsty

Okay...so massive, massive sigh of relief. The obvious to follow infection is going to set in, but she made it to Prague and Kain is there and obviously Sebastian is there safely hidden away getting cared for and with Megs there more than likely, Eris can get treatment as well. I did have to chuckle about Kain telling Casper to back down, because let's face it...I don't think a single of them could go toe to toe with her and live to tell anyone about it. Perhaps Kain and even then, Eris gave him a run for his money on surviving the fight. Anyways...not time to get off track, I am literally grinning ear to ear knowing that she is with Sebastian now...like she said at the end... battered but safe...they can heal here, hopefully without issue from the organization until they are back on their feet and healed. I loved it...I loved that Sebastian turned in that final moment and they saw each other again!! YAY seriously, no matter what they went through they found each other again!!! xoxo

Seriously with the close calls... Eris you just need to focus on getting to the cathedral in Prague, don't worry about the after part...just make it in one piece safely. I'm still not completely convinced that everything is going to work out, perhaps because of the wound in her leg primarily, but blood loss and all that crap, but for the moment she is alive. I might actually start to relax if and when she gets to Prague, but I swear if there is another close call I might just scream! lol xoxo

This is seriously one of the point A to point B style things. Not worrying about what is going to happen, but what is currently happening. Each moment she survives, the better...but with a wounded arm and a bullet still in her leg, this is going to be interesting and tricky to say the least. Of course add to that the new wound to her thigh to get the chip out...by the way smart thinking sending it down the river in a piece of wood. let them chase shadows for a while, while she definitely regroups and gets to Prague...hopefully in one piece and without things like blood loss and infection...because lets face it murky river water...open wounds...yeah... But I love it and Casper's helpful little note there at the end...why do I think he did something a bit too far outside of her comfort zone, especially when it comes to hair colors and the women he knows!! xoxo

There is that shit storm I was talking about! Like I said, if Eris had to dismantle the organization brick by brick to get Sebastian out safely she was going to. Granted instead, she just took well placed shots to send her message. But seriously that was an adrenaline rush to read and something tells me it's not done. I get the feeling this thing is going to blow wide open. And the questions, like did they see Kain? Does this compromise his escape from the organization? And now with the Eris literally throwing herself off a roof with two bullet holes, what now?! Seriously my adrenaline is going now...so no need for more coffee woman!! xoxo

Okay, we have a plan, a plan is good. Again there are times that I wonder about how these guys were ever successful. The things they train their assassins to do, they seem completely incapable of doing themselves. But at least now Eris can listen to the chatter and have a heads up as to what they are planning. And as far as her being the decoy to lure them away, while I get it, because they can't track Kain because they don't know he is there or helping, I'm not sure I like it. This whole plan, no matter how well thought out, again it has too many variables. I get that she wants Sebastian out and safe, but woman...part of him being safe, is knowing that you are okay. The same way you feel about him, he surely feels about you. Anyways, I am rambling again because I am all over the place with this...I just have this feeling, no matter how prepared something is going to go tits up! xoxo