Endless Fire

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

An original poem :) Criticism is welcome :) But nice comments are always good too ;) Let me know what you think! Thanks for reading

Fire.
Endless torment, annexing her soul,
Eating her alive.
His smile rearranges her dreams,
Threatening to take her lucidity away,
And pull her down with the strength of his grip on her.
Where can she run?
There is no one to turn to.
For all of the ones she came to love
Have run away and believed what he said was true.
She’s empty.

He told her he loved her,
Told her he would protect her,
And left her without a second glance,
Promising they would always remain “close friends”,
But even she saw the lie in that.

So when he turns to her and says,
He wants to start over,
What do you think she will say?
Where will she run?
Not into his embrace,
Or his fiery, deceitful eyes,
But to the heartache that with forever torturously burn,
The only sanctuary where she can run away and hide.
 


Submitted: March 20, 2012

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Acie Anderson

To be honest... I very well like this :) I feel this is extremely powerful. I write poems like this so I know what I'm talking about when I say excellent job indeed :)-Acie A.

Wed, March 21st, 2012 3:26am

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Wow thanks so much! :D

Tue, March 20th, 2012 9:59pm

Ian Dawn

I love it as I have said before you have a natural way with your words dont stop, create but try another theme if you can, the work so far is only surface feelings go deep inside and bring them out lay them bare and heal from the writing. Nice work for one so young.

Mon, March 26th, 2012 2:02am

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Thank you so much :) And for the advice too. I will definitely work on that.

Mon, March 26th, 2012 7:17am

Blackdragon99

Ahh Master Yoda G man is your teacher too. he is gifted that one is as are you. This is quite good, the obvious yet hidden explosive side of love. But whats beneath as G said,that needs to be another poem for this one is remarkable, beautiful work.

Sun, May 13th, 2012 1:12am

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Thank you :)

Sun, May 13th, 2012 5:58pm

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