Giving It Up Tonight

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

This poem is about making love from a man's perspective. please read and comment and as always enjoy!

~~Giving It Up Tonight

I finally gain the courage,
To ask her the question that I have been possessing for years,
I anxiously wait for her crimson lips to speak,
And a sigh of relief escapes my mouth as she tells me exactly what I want to hear,
I gaze into her crystal blue eyes,
 To see if she really means it,
But she shuts them tight and I catch a glimpse of her lips trembling,
My instincts tell me to stop,
To get off her,
To hold her tight,
But I don’t,
I stay close to her and gently push,
And suddenly I am on top of the world,
Everything vanishes and I become overpowered with heated passion,
All I want to do is thank her and crash into her continuously,
Tears escape her eyes and her body shakes,
My heart rips in half as I realize how wrong I am,
But everything feels so right,
I cocoon her in my arms and lightly kiss her fragile lips,
And like magic she relaxes into me.


Submitted: August 23, 2014

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smircle

I'm sort of getting the feeling she was a virgin-- otherwise, tears and trembling usually isn't a good sign ;S It's different to read a piece like this from a man's perspective, and the difference in their feelings during the intimate moment-- her trembling, possibly in pain; him blissful, though wary of her state-- is put across well. He didn't want to stop--and didn't-- but felt guilty at her pain; both selfish and caring in the one moment. It flows well and I liked how it didn't rhyme, as it makes it easier to get your point across. Good imagery and the ending almost trailed off, like there's more to come (heh heh). Good job; keep writing! :)

Sat, August 23rd, 2014 6:53pm

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thank you so much. I wrote this poem from her perspective and someone on here asked me to do it from a man's perspective so here it is haha.and yea she was a virgin. the question that he had been holding onto for years was you know the big sex question haha. thanks so much!

Sat, August 23rd, 2014 2:52pm

ImaginationParadox

I liked it, your poetry has such powerful imagery with it. I also felt like I could relate to this poem a little bit.

Sun, August 24th, 2014 2:17am

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thanks

Sun, August 24th, 2014 10:04am

Alex The shadow girl

Anazing poem and brilliant imagery.. Very good. :)

Sun, August 24th, 2014 8:34am

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thank you :)

Sun, August 24th, 2014 10:05am

jedbook

I love this piece it. It's pretty. It was clear to me what this was about and fascinating to actually see it from a guy's perspective. I really enjoyed it.

Fri, September 26th, 2014 3:53am

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thank you so much :)

Fri, September 26th, 2014 11:08am

KW156766

Sorry it took me so long to return the favor, I've just been so busy. But, this was amazing.

Wed, November 5th, 2014 9:24pm

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that's okay and thank you

Wed, November 5th, 2014 5:28pm

Adya Dutta

I really enjoyed it. And good imaginary and great perspective(from a man). I've read v.few like this. Awesome

Wed, April 22nd, 2015 10:32pm

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thank you so much!

Wed, April 22nd, 2015 7:04pm

PenguinPride143

so beautiful! I love it.

Sun, June 28th, 2015 4:18am

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thanks :)

Sat, June 27th, 2015 11:19pm

Sayer

This was beautiful and powerful :)

Wed, July 1st, 2015 3:38pm

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Thanks

Wed, July 1st, 2015 10:18am

peacemaker06

Love and tenderness turns to primal passion and then love and tenderness again. If it's consensual then all is well in my eyes. There was a little fear and apprehension but both parties were willing. I loved the end. So loving and caring. "I cocoon her in my arms and lightly kiss her fragile lips"
"And like magic she relaxes into me." her fear and apprehension dissolved. Again another poem written from the heart and truthfully. Great job ")

Thu, July 9th, 2015 7:47am

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Thank you and yes it was consensual sex haha but it was the girls first time, this is one of my personal favorite poems of mine

Thu, July 9th, 2015 10:56am

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