Shattered Glass

Brownies

Simply amazing.

unmasked delusions

I think its described how you felt perfectly! Great work

swhink

its so sad and it seems like a war of love..great work!

Lisa Ayers

Powerful expression of emotions. I enjoyed the vocabulary and presentation of such a sad time. I hope your family finds peace.

AnnieBirnie

Hello again, I enjoyed this poem very well epecially the part when you say " a depression, a factor, a tear" I hoped there was more to the poem. I really enjoyed it well done, please continue writing :)~Anniebirnie~:)

Raquelita15

My parents got divorced as well, so I can relate to this poem. I like and enjoy poems more when I can relate to them as well. Another good poem.

PoeticMe♥

Wow I love the symbolism you used here :). Great poem, it's written perfectly. ~Poetic

BriannasBooks

Woah, this is wonderful! I can really feel the emotion in this piece, it's described so wonderfully and is written very well. My parents never divorced, but I could still feel everything in this poem. Great job! :)

Ally Shark

My parents fight sometimes, so I find this somewhat relatable. I like the idea and the emotion behind this poem. That said, you might want to look at your first two stanzas. The first stanza never actually has any subject noun, which isn't a bad thing if you were going for a certain effect with that. (It's actually pretty cool!) I'm just not sure that was your intent. In the second stanza, you might want to insert a verb in the first line so there's more of a description of the attacks. Of course, these are just little suggestions; it's still great the way it is! I'm giving it a like! :)

Liam Strong

My parents have been on the brink of divorce the last few years, so I know, somewhat, kind of but not really, how it goes down. My mom blamed me for it having gotten so bad (a time when I felt suicidal and like turning to running away) a little over a year ago. As for the poem itself, I actually really like how minimalist it is, it sets a good abstraction, and if you didn't tell what the poem was about, it could have been about anything; that being said, that may be the only weak point to this poem, not having enough context. My suggestion, and you don't have to do this, it's only a suggestion, would be to add at least one stanza that, still keeping its abstract tone, alludes to your parents divorcing. But it doesn't have to be clear, which is still good! Either way, I still really enjoyed the poem! Good work! Looking forward to more!

Liam Strong

Oh! I totally forgot about that "my family is broken" line! Never mind! Sorry! Haha

Rehmat Tanzila

So sad I feel so sorry you had to go through it! It really hurts! The poem is so emotional!