Shattered Glass

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Memoir  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is a poem I wrote after my parent's divorce. Please comment and tell me what you think about it, Thank you. Enjoy :)

~~Shattered Glass

Once so perfect
composed thoroughly and flawlessly , shining proudly
utter regularity in one place

small attacks from every direction
threatening to break the mirror

the symmetry

more attacks
lasting longer
coming faster

finally success
a small nick

a depression
a fracture
a tear

growing as the minutes increase
the mirror dies

Slaughtering the stability
the devotedness,
my family, now shattered glass.

reliving the war
I wish I had helped
smash it sooner.

Submitted: June 14, 2014

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Simply amazing.

Sat, June 14th, 2014 1:31am


Thank you so much :)

Fri, June 13th, 2014 7:11pm

unmasked delusions

I think its described how you felt perfectly! Great work

Sat, June 14th, 2014 1:34pm


Thank u some people were confused at the end but it's meant to say that sometimes divorce is better

Sat, June 14th, 2014 7:49am


its so sad and it seems like a war of love..great work!

Sun, June 15th, 2014 3:35am


divorced parents...never easy but thank you so much :)

Sat, June 14th, 2014 10:12pm

Lisa Ayers

Powerful expression of emotions. I enjoyed the vocabulary and presentation of such a sad time. I hope your family finds peace.

Sun, June 15th, 2014 6:26am


thank you very much :)

Sun, June 15th, 2014 7:22am


Hello again, I enjoyed this poem very well epecially the part when you say " a depression, a factor, a tear" I hoped there was more to the poem. I really enjoyed it well done, please continue writing :)~Anniebirnie~:)

Thu, June 26th, 2014 3:04pm


thanks again :) you are so awesome for reading all of my work!

Thu, June 26th, 2014 9:15am


My parents got divorced as well, so I can relate to this poem. I like and enjoy poems more when I can relate to them as well. Another good poem.

Tue, July 1st, 2014 9:56pm


I'm glad you could relate to this then thanks for the read

Tue, July 1st, 2014 3:41pm


Wow I love the symbolism you used here :). Great poem, it's written perfectly. ~Poetic

Tue, July 22nd, 2014 2:48am


thanks so much :)

Mon, July 21st, 2014 8:23pm


Woah, this is wonderful! I can really feel the emotion in this piece, it's described so wonderfully and is written very well. My parents never divorced, but I could still feel everything in this poem. Great job! :)

Mon, August 11th, 2014 5:37pm


thanks so much for reading it im glad u liked it

Mon, August 11th, 2014 11:11am

Ally Shark

My parents fight sometimes, so I find this somewhat relatable. I like the idea and the emotion behind this poem. That said, you might want to look at your first two stanzas. The first stanza never actually has any subject noun, which isn't a bad thing if you were going for a certain effect with that. (It's actually pretty cool!) I'm just not sure that was your intent. In the second stanza, you might want to insert a verb in the first line so there's more of a description of the attacks. Of course, these are just little suggestions; it's still great the way it is! I'm giving it a like! :)

Tue, June 23rd, 2015 2:38am


oh thank you so much :) I am not hugely into the exactness of poetry if that makes sense but thank you for the suggestions!

Mon, June 22nd, 2015 7:44pm

Liam Strong

My parents have been on the brink of divorce the last few years, so I know, somewhat, kind of but not really, how it goes down. My mom blamed me for it having gotten so bad (a time when I felt suicidal and like turning to running away) a little over a year ago. As for the poem itself, I actually really like how minimalist it is, it sets a good abstraction, and if you didn't tell what the poem was about, it could have been about anything; that being said, that may be the only weak point to this poem, not having enough context. My suggestion, and you don't have to do this, it's only a suggestion, would be to add at least one stanza that, still keeping its abstract tone, alludes to your parents divorcing. But it doesn't have to be clear, which is still good! Either way, I still really enjoyed the poem! Good work! Looking forward to more!

Tue, June 23rd, 2015 3:33am


im sorry to hear that, its never easy. if u need to talk about it im here. thank you for reading! and I thought I did that when I said my family is broken but idk

Mon, June 22nd, 2015 9:14pm

Liam Strong

Oh! I totally forgot about that "my family is broken" line! Never mind! Sorry! Haha

Tue, June 23rd, 2015 1:12pm


Lol it's all good

Tue, June 23rd, 2015 6:47am

Rehmat Tanzila

So sad I feel so sorry you had to go through it! It really hurts! The poem is so emotional!

Sat, August 5th, 2017 4:49pm

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