Broken (Save me)

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

After watching the love her of life being murdered right in front of her eyes, things start to go downhill very fast. She even attempts suicide, but things don't plan out as she hoped they would.

Note; I rated this PG because of the vivid description of the murder in the beginning.


Broken (Save me)


I still remember how the heavy, rusted metal chains felt gnawing into my raw shoulders and the terrifying feeling of that gun being pressed up against my head, loaded and ready to shoot if I would have tried to move or run (even though the chains kept me from doing any of that.)  I still remember the stinging pains shooting through me while being whipped with that thick leather belt until my skin broke and started to bleed, and how helpless and defeated it felt to not be able to do anything to save myself as they tied me up and held me down, choking me until I basically turned purple. The most unendurable and heart wrenching part of it all was when I was forced to watch them viciously murder the love of my life in his own cold blood.  I can still see the look on his face as he watched me being beaten and bruised every single time that I cried out his name or begged them to let him go and to keep me instead.


He looked so empty, so helpless, and so terrified that he couldn’t do anything to save me or stop them. I could tell just by looking at him how guilty he had felt, although he had no reason to feel that way. None of this was his fault. There was no way he could have stopped any of it from happening. I will absolutely never forget holding his hand as tight as I possibly could while he was being beaten to his last breath or the way he turned around and looked me right in the eyes as he barely whispered his final word, “Goodbye.”

I miss him with each passing second that goes by of every day and every night.  It should have been me that got killed, not him. I was the one who was going nowhere in life, but he had a future ahead of him. A week before his death he had just gotten accepted into a college that he’d been excited about since the fourth grade.  Now he will never get his chance to make something of himself and we will never be able to have our own little family that we have always talked about having years down the road. God, what am I going to do without him? I’m seriously going crazy doing this whole “living” thing on my own. I can’t do this alone. I just can’t.

My life without him is absolutely worthless and pointless. Honestly, I don’t even see a single reason for staying here anymore. I feel like I’m falling down a black hole and I don’t know when I’m going to hit the bottom and just die. I’m just so empty inside. He’s the only one that I had left in my life. He’s the one person that actually cared about me and was there for me no matter what, and now he’s gone and he’s not coming back. I have nothing left. I can’t take one more moment of this silence, the loneliness is haunting me.  I need something to numb this pain and to make all of these voices in my head that keep screaming at me to “just end it already” go away.

I can’t even tell if I’m actually alive or not, I know that I’m breathing because I can feel it, but I’m just so dead and empty inside. I don’t know what else to do since my razor blade is nowhere to be found, so I turn to my next option for the quickest and easiest way out. On impulse, I grab the bottle of sleeping pills off of my bedroom dresser and swallow down fourteen or fifteen, hoping that I’ll just go to sleep and not wake back up. For the love of God, I just want to die already!

*minutes later*

Nothing but blackness is all around me. I don’t know where I am, but it is so loud in here (wherever “here” is.) Surrounding me and the place that I am at is a familiar ear piercing scream. I remember why the scream sounds so familiar now because it was my devastated, heart-broken scream of absolute pain and sadness after Kayben had died and I watched with squinted eyes as they pounded him ten more times against his head and chest with a big, metal baseball bat (just to make sure that he was a complete goner.) What coldhearted people they were! Where am I? Am I dead? Is this where you go after you die? I’m really confused and scared. Why am I hearing that scream? If I’m dead, I shouldn’t be hearing stuff that happened before I died, I should just be dead

All of a sudden I hear a deep male voice calling out my name. I try to start walking towards wherever the voice is coming from, but it’s nearly impossible because I can’t see a single thing and the voice is echoing in every which direction. I keep thinking about how on the day of Kayben’s death we were on our way to go have a romantic picnic in the middle of the woods (because the leaves were so beautiful and we both adored nature) but we never got to because of what happened. I can’t help but to think to myself about how much I just want him back in my arms and to know where the heck I am at.

The deep voice speaks out, “You want him back, dear? Aww, too bad so sad.”
Trembling, I force the words out, “How do you know who I’m talking about? Who are you?”
“I’m your worst nightmare. Be afraid.”
“Are you afraid?”
“Yes, obviously!”
“Good, good.”
“So, can you tell me where I am?”
“No, but I can show you.”
“Okay. Do it.”
“I said I can, not that I want to. Silly girl.”
“Gosh, just show me!”
“Ooh, a feisty one, aren’t you? I can't see why he liked you so much.”

All of a sudden the place gets really bright, almost as if somebody had turned the lights on.  Looking around, I see nothing but a small, blank room with three narrow doors. Two of the doors are labeled “death”, and one of the doors is labeled “Kayben”.  Oh, my god, Kayben? I’m going to be able to see him? I can’t fight back the tears that are streaming down my face faster than a bolt of lightning as I’m running to the door that is apparently going to lead me straight to him. 

The voice stops me, “Not so fast, child. How do you know that door is going to take you to him?” 
“Umm, because it’s labeled with his name on it.” 
“And you’re going to trust it?”
"I have no other choice but to trust it, so I guess so.”
“Now I can see why you don’t have any friends, you trust too easily. Foolish child.”
“I am not a child and you are just trying to get inside my mind.”
“Maybe, maybe not. Who knows? Not you.”


Then there was a weird silence that fell upon the room as I heard another voice echoing through. It sounded a lot like Kayben, no joke. It couldn't be him. How is that possible?

I couldn’t help but to scream out, “Kayben, Kayben is that you?”
“Yes, it is me. What are you doing to yourself? Why did you try to kill yourself? God, no! Now look what happened!”
“I couldn’t live without you. Where are you? Please, I need to see you. Just please!” 
“You can see me only if you choose the right door, but they aren’t labeled correctly. Don’t be tricked by them.” 
“Where am I?”
“You are trapped in a state between life and death. Please choose your door wisely.” 
“I don’t know which door to choose! Which door do I choose? I can’t lose you again!”
“I can’t tell you. Just follow your heart, you can do this. I have faith in you.”
I can’t stop the tears from falling, “No, no I can’t, Kayben! What was left of my heart died with you! Please just tell me so we can be together again! Please, I’m begging you!” 
“Willow, just follow my voice, okay? It will all be okay, I promise."

I trust him, of course I do. What if it actually isn’t him, though? What if the voice is playing tricks on me? I don’t care, I have to take the chance. I just have to! I start walking towards his voice, but again, it’s echoing from every direction and I can’t tell which direction his voice is actually coming from. I just want him back. I need him back. That’s all there is to it. Out of nowhere, the cuts on my wrists start burning very badly. What is happening?

The voice calls out, “How does that feel, child?” 
I cry out, “You’re not going to stop me!”

Without thinking twice, I run towards the second door that says death but then I stop right in front of it. Maybe the voice isn’t as smart as he thinks he is, and he’s just trying to get inside my head? Maybe it actually is the door that says Kayben? With trembling hands, I turn the handle of the door labeled “Kayben” and push it open. I close my eyes just for a second because i'm scared of knowing what might be standing there in front of me but then I open them when I feel his warm, strong arms wrap around me. This is the feeling I’ve been longing for since his death. I cannot describe to you the feeling of getting the one that you love back after you thought that they were gone forever. 

He looks down into my eyes, that same exact look that he did as he took his last breath before he died and says, “Willow. You’re actually here.”

The tears are still rolling, and there’s no stopping them, “I love you. I can’t believe I got you back. I can’t believe it!”
“I love you so much. I’m so sorry I left you. Before I met you, I never knew what it was like to be able to look at somebody and smile for no reason. You mean everything to me!” He whispers, and the tears start running down his face.

I never seen him actually cry before. I wipe away his tears and wrap my arms back around him. I am never letting go of him again. I never would have believed this possible, until now. The impossible is possible, he just proved that to me. 

With a smile, he says, “My heart will always be yours, now let’s go.”
“You have always had my heart, Kayben. Always and forever. But, go where?”
He rubs his fingers along my face gently and then puts a strand of hair behind my ear and whispers against my cheek, “Let’s go home.” 
“Wait, how do we get out of here? There are no ways to escape, except for these three doors.” I ask him, absolutely excited to go continue my life with him and grow old with him but wondering if there is a  way to leave this place.
Then the voice interrupts, “That’s right. There’s no escaping this place! You're stuck.”
Kayben yells back, so angry that I can see the veins popping out of his forehead, “But, you promised! God, you freaking promised me!”
“I lied." the voice’s hysterical, evil laugh surrounds the room.

I don’t care that we can’t get out, as long as we’re together then that’s all that matters to me. Kayben kisses me on the forehead, trying to reassure me that everything will be okay. I grab his hand and he holds on as tight as he possibly can as we walk through the first death door together, with no fear or regrets. As odd as it may sound, dying together (even though we were technically already dead) seemed better than being trapped in this evil place forever. Our love overcame everything, despite all that has happened. It shouldn’t have, but it did. 

Submitted: November 18, 2014

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B Douglas Slack

A very, very, very good story. If faced with those choices, I think I would have made the same decisions. Well done!

Tue, November 18th, 2014 10:43pm


Thank you so much! I'm so happy that you liked it! Hugs!

Tue, November 18th, 2014 2:58pm


An interesting story (in the good way). I feel sorry for Willow, she goes through so much pain. I'm glad Willow and Kayben got to be together in the end. :) Great story

Wed, November 19th, 2014 12:17am


I'm happy that you liked it! Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Hugs!!

Tue, November 18th, 2014 4:20pm

Sai Ryoko

Loved reading your story. Willow made a hard decision though, not sure if I could do that though... Ah but I loved it! *^*

Wed, November 19th, 2014 3:48am


Thank you so much. I'm so happy that you liked it. Yes, she did have to make a very hard decision and to be honest i'm not exactly sure if I could do that or not either. Hugs!

Tue, November 18th, 2014 7:58pm


If it weren't for having two little sisters and a grandmother sitting in front of me asking whats wrong, I would be crying SO bad... its just so.. emotional..

Wed, November 19th, 2014 5:14am


Awww, haha! I'm so happy that you liked it and it's so cute that they are so concerned about you. Thank you for taking your time to read and comment, much hugs!!

Tue, November 18th, 2014 9:32pm


I cannot explain it, I'm just in awe right now. This story is nothing like anything else I've ever read, so unique, and such a brilliant idea. I just love it! Kayben and Willow have been through more than anybody, they definitly deserved to live, together I mean. Even after such a great, amazing story, I till have questions. Like, why did those horrible people murder Kayben?! And who is it speaking to them, is he the Devil? It's really, REALLY good. Actually this is one of your finest stories I think!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 5:22am


Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I'm so happy that you liked it. To answer your questions, those horrible people murdered Kayben basically because they were just plain out horrible people! They get pleasure out of watching and making others suffer, how cruel. The voice speaking to them is basically like the devil, you could say, but not quite the devil. Just the ruler of the room between life and death, behind the death doors were the entrances to the devil's lair, where they would burn eternally. So that place that Willow was in would be like a separate room just above the devil, so the voice was more like the devil's little minion! Haha, hope these answer your questions! Hugs!

Tue, November 18th, 2014 9:36pm

Miss Melodramatic

This story is haunting with its bittersweet ending. I kind of anticipated it but I liked it all the same. Willow sounded so heartbroken after Kayben died so I'm happy they're together although they're dead. Good work.

Wed, November 19th, 2014 5:52am


I'm so glad that you liked it. Thank you for commenting, MM! She was so heartbroken, the poor girl. Oops, it was too easy to figure out if you guessed it! Haha! Thank you so much! Hugs to you!!

Tue, November 18th, 2014 9:56pm


Wow this is such a brilliant story and something I have never read before, absolutely breath taking really. I felt very sorry for Willow after he died all the pain that she went through. I am happy that they are back together again that brought tears to my eyes, even though they are dead they are still with each other absolutely beautiful.

Wed, November 19th, 2014 7:07am


Thank you so much! I'm so happy that you liked it. Hugs!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 6:00am


Wow, that was heavy in a good way:)

Wed, November 19th, 2014 7:11am


Thank you for readings! Glad you liked it!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 6:00am

Amy Furzane

Great story. It must be hard for Willow after losing Kayben. I hope they will stay and survive together.

Wed, November 19th, 2014 11:48am


Thank you for reading! I know, poor girl. Hugs to you!!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 6:00am


The ending was so sad and beautiful at the same time. Willow is reunited with her true love. Sadly enough she had to die for that. The descriptions were so detailed and the story was very nice to read. I really liked it :3

Wed, November 19th, 2014 4:25pm


Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I'm so happy that you liked it. People do crazy things for true love, though! Hugs!!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 8:33am


Ya know ya coulda written the prologue to my story; I have a girl at a grave with her heart wrenched in grief due to her lover being murdered in front of her. Not tortured as much as your girl. So I love it!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 4:26pm


Haha oops! Sorry about that! I didn't know that you had a similar story, but i'm so happy that you liked it still! Hugs!!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 8:34am


That was a great insight on death and love... And you potrayed the emotions of Willow when she lost Kayben was damn good... It was raw and it was deep... And the last line that "Our love overcam everything" is really heart touching...
Awesome job!!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 5:01pm


Oh my gosh thank you so much! I'm so happy that you liked it and I can never thank you enough for your sweet comment. Lots of hugs!!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 9:06am


did she just died? Well that's what I think of. It is a good story, and amazing grammar structure. You mixed past tense then present in the rest of the story very creative. I didn't know that love can be like this. I used think of that, but when I look over my shoulder I envision what love really is about. Good story, nice job on this. Like.

Wed, November 19th, 2014 5:08pm


Thank you so much for your sweet comments, Donjc9! I'm so happy that you liked it and it got you thinking how love can come in all different ways. Lots of hugs to you!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 9:14am

Abdelmalek ELMAKRYNI

All i can say is that i liked your story. it is an interesting story that i have ever read! all what has been said regarding your story is to the point! on the other hand, i advise you to avoid using rounded sentences that make ambeguity! apart from that, you have done a very great job! your writing is worth reading and long reading.

Wed, November 19th, 2014 7:21pm


Thank you so much! I'm so happy that you liked it. "Avoid using rounded sentences that make ambeguity!" < I was confused by that, what do you mean? Thanks for the advice, though! Much hugs to you!!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 12:27pm


This is a really well written short story, and full of great descriptions! Being that I've seen a loved one die in front of me very suddenly, I find Willow very relatable. My only critique would be to space the first paragraph more :)

Wed, November 19th, 2014 10:52pm


Thank you so much for the advice! I'm so happy that you liked it. I'm so sorry that you had to go through that. Lots of hugs to you!!

Wed, November 19th, 2014 3:46pm

Matthew D. Hay (Tangible Word)

Not my kind of story, but say, five years ago, I probably would've been writing around the same thing. I remember being fourteen and writing, but I wasn't this structurally coherent.
I could pinpoint the problems in your story and prose, just like any older writer could do to my own works.
But, I like to focus on the positive things when commenting (unless it's absolutely awful, which this isn't). You've got good dialogue, and while your first sentence was undoubtedly of the run-on variety, you didn't repeat that mistake too often.
In fact, your sentence structure is rather good.
You understand, mostly, what a paragraph is for.
Over all, you're good. Keep this up, and just maybe our ignored, failing, self-published e-books will inhabit the same electronic shelves.

Thu, November 20th, 2014 6:57am


Thank you so much for your advice and honest opinion! I'm so happy that you liked it! LOL that last line was funny! Maybe they will! xoxo lots of hugs!

Thu, November 20th, 2014 5:47am

Vance Currie

Hi Krys. You left a reading request on Jola's page. Jola doesn't write for Booksie any more and doesn't often visit his page. I have read and enjoyed your work before, so I accepted your request on Jola's behalf and decided to check this story out. It is eminently readable and imaginative; which is what I have come to expect from your stories. I enjoyed it very much. Well done.

Thu, November 20th, 2014 7:40pm


Oops! Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm glad that you liked it. Lots of hugs!!

Fri, November 21st, 2014 9:50am


I have honestly absolutely no words for this story..... This was one of the cutest stories EVER!!! It was so detailed and I just... I don't know what to say!!!! THIS WAS THE BEST STORY EVER!!!!!!

Thu, November 20th, 2014 8:26pm


Haha awww thank you so much! I'm so happy that you liked it! Hugs!!

Fri, November 21st, 2014 9:50am

Mysterious Flamess

VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY FREAKIN' WONDERFUL!!!! That made me so so so so so so so so so so so soooooo emotional. It was probably the best thing that I've ever read! I was sad for Willow in the beginning, but at the end, my sorrow was replaced with happiness! I'm so glad that she got to be with Kayben again. However, the way that they spent their last few moments were freakin sick! Anyways, I loved it.

Fri, November 21st, 2014 10:48pm


Oh my gosh haha thank you so much! I'm so happy that you liked it. Hugs to you!!

Fri, November 21st, 2014 7:26pm


Hay another awesome story from you. Really liked the ending. Willow is really cool. you are really good at these types of stories. This was really well writting. I hope your doing good.

Fri, November 21st, 2014 11:36pm


Thank you so much, Dennis! I'm so happy that you liked it. I'm doing okay, I hope you're doing good, too. Lots of hugs sent your way!!

Fri, November 21st, 2014 7:26pm

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