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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

I think this was my second poem... not quite sure. Give it a go?

Tender hearts; restless and rhythmic

Fluttering jaunty wings

Of sparrows in the day-lit sky

Free for what Springtime brings.


New life, new birth, love trundles on

Cancelling memories dark

For those which winter left behind,

Depict the bitter stark.


The birds, they sing in symphony

Prompting flowers to bloom

Eluding darkness and despair

Bypassing straight to doom.


Banished from Elysium Fields

Thespian scene plays out

Elegiac thoughts prevent rest

And grievance leads to doubt.


And forgiven they are at last

Succumbed to Aphrodite’s spell

Redemption flows unerringly

Now escaped of Hades’ Hell.

Submitted: April 22, 2012

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Chris Gerard

Definite improvement, tending towards the intellectual, but nothing wrong with that - someone your age should be experimenting with words and sounds and ideas, and you also have an obvious talent and a love for words to go along with all that, so I believe you're just going to get better and better.

Mon, April 23rd, 2012 9:00am


Only noticing this now, thank you very much for your encouragement, it's lovely to hear. :)

Tue, May 8th, 2012 2:28pm

Adam Williamson

That I understood and enjoyed *****

Fri, April 27th, 2012 8:32pm

Laura Finn

Thanks guys. :)

Fri, April 27th, 2012 8:41pm

Sammy Wang Yang

Great poem.

Tue, July 3rd, 2012 7:42pm

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