The Boat.

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

I don't think this one is much like what I usually write, it's the first time I tried writing independently with a purpose (theme of voyages) but I don't think it reflects myself well.

I looked upon the dusty boat
And wondered to myself
Is this a craft so sure to float,
And thus ensure my health?

The sails were out, the anchor up
We cast off from the shore
Awaiting new sights like a pup,
Who’d not been out before.

The waves, the wind, the sun, the sky
The peacefulness above
Imprint upon the inward eye
Gentle such as a dove.

‘Til O! The stormy weather comes
And challenges the ship
Bending with weight, the mast does hum
The boat, she takes a dip.

But rights herself as sun appears
Balance again restored
Extinguishing begotten fears
Now she is free to soar.

And destination reached at last
The rolling hills and streams
But the voyage is not yet passed
The dear ship, she still gleams.


Submitted: April 23, 2012

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Brian W

You have done well with this and your words paint a picture of what is happening..Good flow and rhyme...
But I can not remember ever seeing a dusty boat as they sit on water...Well written

Wed, May 2nd, 2012 10:33pm

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Thank you very much. :) I try to keep the rhyme scheme and sullable count the same in my work to get it to have an almost beat-like quality. And they just didn't like the boat enough to clean it, poor boat...

Wed, May 2nd, 2012 3:38pm

McHeaven McHeaven

I guess the boat pertains your will and determination to reach your goal. Great work in using personification on this one. The dust in the boat is not literally a dust but rather your personal fear and doubts, just maybe. I mean it's how I see it. Good verse contruction, well done!

Mon, May 7th, 2012 2:18am

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Pretty much got it in one. :) It was on the theme of a voyage and this is what I ended up with. Thanks!

Mon, May 7th, 2012 2:20am

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