Reponse to Kitkat's Challenge: Under a Red Laurel Tree

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This is for Kitkat's challenge where you pick a color and a number. The number tells you how many words you'll get and the color has to be frequently mentioned in the poem. I orignally chose five words but under circustances I dont feel like explaining, I had to change it to one word which is friendly.
I worked hard on this one so I'd LOVE some feedback!!!

Submitted: September 14, 2008

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Under a red Laurel Tree

 
Under a red Laurel tree
I watched the sea
As its red waves crashed upon the shore
The sun was setting, creating that color I adore
The sky was red, passion ablaze
Just as your friendly gaze
Under a red Laurel tree
I steal a peek, just to see
As the wind blew the leaves away
I watched as the wind helped the branches to sway
The sea’s roar reminds me of red
The anger you bred
Although, I love your eyes
Even when they cause me to cry
You wave your hand and make me swoon
Your voice is a soothing as Fall’s afternoon
Do not be angry with me
For this I could not bare; I love you more than you see
You’re angry with yourself, you realize
I notice as I watch your eyes
Under a red Laurel tree
You hold me tighter than ever
You stroke my hair, mulling over this endeavor
I see your thoughts as plain as the red leaf you hold
You twirl its stem between your fingers, not wishing your secret to be told
You know the feeling is red
It was a feeling you wanted to dread
But I know your secret
I try not to think of it as you pull me closer, no reason to fret
I assure you
As I lay my head on your chest, “I’ll be true.”
Then the scene ends and we disappear
Only the red Laurel tree standing in the clear
I suddenly awake in my bed
Clinging to the blanket my grandmother made which is red
 
 


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