Don't Let it Be

Nick Dwyer

"This deep darkened weight is resting,

Choosing me."

Is brutal and honest about what we perceive
as your illness. It is also finely poetic.But I would beware the next sentiment...

"As if I haven't sacrificed enough

Is this the prize?"

... as it invites pity, which I don't think is what you intend?

Strong poetry that ably takes up Robert Frost's challenge in your bio. I like it.

Methelusa

Really enjoyed this, abstract yet to the point, and allowec me make the sentiments universal, which I believe may have been the intention.

Adelaide Lawrence

this wasn't really sad, just exasperated and frustrated. I liked it. Good style. I could feel what you were feeling when you wrote this poem. Keep it up.

Tesseth

"This deep darkened weight is resting,
Choosing me."

Yea, Nick picked that quote in his comment too... I couldn't resist -- that was the one I was going to pick anyway!

AND as far as his comment to this line:
"As if I haven't sacrificed enough
Is this the prize?"

I so understand where you were coming from with that one (your circumstances)! Actually it was the one that moved ME the VERY most (MY circumstances)! Because I get it, I feel it, I live it... not a line of "pity" --- a line of exasperation --- I don't deserve this!

Well, that's my take :)

Wonderful leesah --- this one truly touched me.

Take care,
Tesseth/Stevie

Pratibha

Just, don't let it be so.

As if I haven't sacrificed enough

Is this the prize?

When my soul has given and my energy wasted

For no ones glory

What Else?!

What else do you want from me?

I gave searching for this answer....i cried so much that one fine day, i realised that i have no tears left....none...but no smile either...

What did i do? Where did i go wrong? etc etc etc ....so many questions like meteors bombarding my mind and robbing me of all peace ....

Then, one day i was enlightened to the fact that -
" I won't give up" just as u have so delicately highlighted here...

All ur poems are as if they r for your "READERs'" as if u r inside our minds.....

voted for it, effortlessly....it doesnot deserve less than million 'i like it" s

Keep me informed about all ur posts ...PLEASE..

Willie N Small

"Hope waits in distant whispers of utter need" That is all I needed to feel you in this piece. I wanted to scream "F@$k you hope !! F@$k you !! … F@$k hope. Grief is but a bed fellow I have I have slept with to many times. I have grown old with. Numb to it all I want to suffocate on this emotion and smile on my way out." Great job bringing describing color to the blind I like it.