I Dream

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

This poem is just a wish. I recently found out some news about my health. It was devastating and writing this helped me have hope and courage.

I Dream

I dream I'm dancing along the shore
and the sun shines down
and I close my eyes
and eveything is in its perfect view,
perfect form
It feels this good to move
It feels like I can run a race
I can hurdle each trial, each pain,
each sad thought.
I leave them behind.
Feeling the world is not so heavy,
its only my stage and my part
is to play the 'me' I always wanted to be,
carefree.
I dance fast, I jump and leap
I fall and laugh because I can get up again.
I like this dream
Its me, and its happening. 


Submitted: February 17, 2007

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EdwardJBradleySr

leesah:

Wonderfully expressed message of spirituality.

Feelings of hope triumphing over disappointment and physical limitations.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Sat, February 17th, 2007 7:01pm

Author
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Thank you. Your comment is very much appreciated.

Sun, February 18th, 2007 1:54am

Nick Dwyer

Yeah. The rhythm is fluent and the sentiments, if a little "oh poor me" perhaps, are well conveyed.

A lot of poetry seems to consist of similar musings on the troubles of self (and as in your case here the triumphs over such troubles) or alternatively on the pleasures of self (check the other poetry on-site). I wonder why. I really do. There's a whole world out there to write about.

Please note most reviewers are much softer than me! Don't be scared off - I'm the ogre of Booksie.

Welcome. It's fun here, really.

Sat, February 17th, 2007 7:05pm

Author
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Thanks for the comment. I'm not scared off, believe me, I've had worse comments before. Well..all I can tell you is if you're going through something hard especially finding out you have a disease and it consumes you, it kinda makes me you feel, well, like crap. And just like painting, I express myself through words, everyone does here I guess. Yes, not all poetry should be all about the troubles of self, but in this case, it is.

Sat, February 17th, 2007 1:50pm

devilrod

This poem is what I think of as active Zen. Beautiful.

Thu, February 22nd, 2007 7:23am

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Thank you, exactly my point. I like that word, Zen.

Thu, February 22nd, 2007 1:20am

Doc Scurlock

I've been reading your poetry and frankly it's very hard to think of what you can say to somebody who's writing about having a serious illness without souding patronising or idiotic. So: I like your poetry.

Sun, February 25th, 2007 12:24am

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Well I wouldn't know either. I think your comment was very honest and I really appreciate that. Thank you Doc Scurlock.

Sat, February 24th, 2007 6:09pm

Samii

A really beautiful peace! I especially like the line "I can hurdle each trial, each pain,
each sad thought" If only this was not just a dream and we all had the ability to hurdle our pains and sadness. Well done.

Fri, March 9th, 2007 12:19pm

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Thank you so much! I guess in a dream you can DO ANYTHING!

Fri, March 9th, 2007 4:58pm

Checkered Faces

Dreams are so important in life. This is wonderful.

Thu, March 15th, 2007 4:28pm

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Thank you so much, thanks for taking the time.

Thu, March 15th, 2007 4:52pm

Adelaide Lawrence

that was amazing. I loved the carefree nature of your dreams and the longing way that you described something so simple as laughing. I think this will teach people not to take anything for granted, and I loved this poem. I'm sorry about your health.

Sat, April 7th, 2007 7:29pm

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Thank you Adelaide,for your very kind words. I imagined this when I heard I had rheumatoid arthritis along with having an autoimmune disorder which effects my heart and liver ...and they say if you imagine it, it will happen. SO this poem came out. It gave me alot of hope. Thank you again for your thoughts:)

Sat, April 7th, 2007 2:20pm

Susie E

Being that this poem was written in Feb., I hope things are going better for you:) This is a beautiful poem. I am sure you are not alone in dreams such as these when one finds themselves in a certain situation. Never give up on your dreams...it keeps you young, it keeps you going! It reminds me of a qoute from a piece I once wrote..."If no one dared to try to reach beyond their limits, there would be no accomplished goals. If no one dared to make a wish, to dream of what could be or have faith to believe, there would be no miracles."
Take care:)
Susie

Thu, April 19th, 2007 3:38am

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Ok, I just got a little emotional...thank you for that qoute....yes, they say when you imagine or dream it, even if you have to draw it, it will happen. I, will myself to complete healing. I'm doing as good as I can...thank you for your encouraging words Susie...

Thu, April 19th, 2007 2:29am

Rospi

leesah, a beautiful, moving, hopeful poem...I think it is so brave that you can write about your self, and to share all your inner feelings. From my heart I wish you the best of health and prayers. Take care of yourself, God bless, Rospi/Maria.

Sun, April 22nd, 2007 11:31am

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Thank you Rospi for your kind, warm words...but especially the prayers...thank you so much....all the best back to you

Sun, April 22nd, 2007 4:47am

Sunnyson

Leesah like terry i also found this poem very uplifting, When life gets you down there are always our dreams to fall back on to restore our faith.
Lovely work!

Thu, April 26th, 2007 3:34pm

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Thank you so much Sunny...I appreciate you taking the time:)

Thu, April 26th, 2007 1:55pm

Nemy

this is a great poem. well done leesah. well written.

Fri, May 11th, 2007 10:49am

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thank you so much, one of my favorites...I appreciate you taking the time:)

Fri, May 11th, 2007 1:26pm

ThePseudoMe

I really like this piece leesah. I love the ' I can do anything I put my mind to ' attitude I get from it. Wonderfully written and inspiring. Great work Dear :)

Fri, May 11th, 2007 9:09pm

Author
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Thank you Pseudo...this piece is one of my favorites, a time when I thought I couldn't handle but....writing helped through

Fri, May 11th, 2007 2:11pm

zephyrmail

without dreams, I couldn't make it till tomorrow--ignore ogres--they're just jealous--:) it's beautiful--honestly !!!!!!!!

Sat, May 12th, 2007 12:38am

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Well thank you Z, this is one of my favorites actually, because this is the one that launched me to get back to writing and also, it helped me envision what I want out of life after all the things I've been through with my health issues....thank you for reading!!

Fri, May 11th, 2007 7:30pm

celeron22

Many people find writing as a way of releasing their feelings because they may have no one to talk to or simply because they just don't want to burden other people with their problems,I do this a lot as it helps so much,Feel free to release your thoughts and feelings with us, it's all about unloading your worries and stresses, and clearly you need to as you're going through a lot.This was beautiful Leesah and I really hope you're feeling better.Keep up the great work.

Sat, May 12th, 2007 10:53pm

Author
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Thank you so much Celeron, your comment eases me and gives me kind of a comfort to know that I'm among 'friends' here. I do at times feel it's unnecessary to rehearse the struggle, but I also need to learn that it is 'ok'...to let it out and let it go...that's a process, isn't it? Thank you again...I really appreciate it:) you can email me if you like rainey_falls72@yahoo.com....have a great mothers day and great weekend!

Sat, May 12th, 2007 6:18pm

Methelusa

Where has this gem been hiding!? Beautiful, lovely imagery and a powerful sentiment. Makes you want to re-visit your friendships and bonds to people and what they mean to you.

Sat, May 12th, 2007 11:09pm

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Well..it was my very first poem I submitted here on booksie, months ago....kind of a sentimental one for me, since I wrote it during a rough time...envisioning my deepest desire as a whole, healthy being. I'm really glad you liked...:)

Sat, May 12th, 2007 6:20pm

Treshawna

lOVED IT. I really admired how you portrayed your feelings to be so free and in a sense of feeling good. Well done, sometime i find it a bit difficult to write my happy feelings rather than my sad feelings it's easier to write about. Well done xxx, your work is truely inspirational.

Sun, July 22nd, 2007 6:30pm

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One of my gems..this one..even though it doesn't hold a form, but this one holds some kind of sentimental feel...thank you for reading!

Tue, July 24th, 2007 10:18am

Qcontinu

I love the energy in this poem, it gives hope to me as a reader that there is hope in this life. To defeat mortal boundaries, you describe it pretty well. Your rock!

Sun, September 16th, 2007 4:43am

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aw thank you ...this one actually holds very close to my heart since it launched me back into writing...something inspired me when I heard my health was not doing so well, so this came about, glad you enjoyed:)

~Leesah

Sat, September 15th, 2007 9:48pm

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