remembering all the lies

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic

the first girl i ever fell for shattered me this is about that experience

Dark Clouds

staring up at the clouds

remembering all the lies

time slowly ticks by

i sit under the dark clouds

as darkness shrouds

around me

the wind plays with my hair

while i stare

at the storm brewing around me

i remember you, all the memories

the smile spreads across his face

though i lose the race

i start to pace

this broken heart

is like a sour tart

this unforgiving plight

only worsens in the night

 all alone under these stars

it reminds me of prison bars

i lock away my broken heart

under these clouds,these stars

i lock away the peices in metal jars

 


Submitted: April 19, 2012

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LoneWolf93

I really enjoyed this, even though it's quite sad. Your writing style is awesome. Thanks for the reading request! :) x

Thu, April 19th, 2012 2:46pm

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well i enjoy your writing and thank you I truly value your opinion :)

Thu, April 19th, 2012 9:30am

lilyrose 1997

i love it very well written and i love your style very sad yet so many people would be alble to relate to it .... maybe stop by and look at some of my work :)

Thu, April 19th, 2012 6:25pm

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I'll get right on it thanks for your input :)

Fri, April 20th, 2012 5:35am

SPURIOUS

I really like your wording and the way you have told the story. Great work :)

Fri, April 20th, 2012 12:14pm

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thank you again if you like this I'm sure you'll enjoy some of the others I'll be posting soon

Fri, April 20th, 2012 5:34am

Sezan Vahpieva

hey, i like it :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 11:18am

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thanks :)

Fri, April 27th, 2012 5:30am

Vampy2034

Very emotional. I love it. Its fantastic.

Fri, May 11th, 2012 2:50pm

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it showcases my true feelings and thank you very much

Fri, May 11th, 2012 10:18am

sina fisher

i really liked this one good job!

Wed, May 16th, 2012 12:36pm

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thank you it actually happened last year, it was well not exactly fun

Wed, May 16th, 2012 5:39am

teddi tee

My first love tore me up like shredded paper, and laughed as I floated away in the wind.
I share your pain love.

Sat, May 26th, 2012 11:13am

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my first love was complicated and not the worst experience i have never had but its in the top 5

Sat, May 26th, 2012 6:17am

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