Wasted Secrets

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It's pretty confusing when you first read it but if you understand how the stanzers alternate between characters then maybe you'll understand. I wrote it when I was trying to understand why I was so bottled up with my emotions. I tried to emphasize in this poem how anger comes and goes easily but also creates pain just as easily which is harder to make disappear.

Wasted Secrets

Anger seered through her cheeks.

He left before it would start again.

Slowly but surely it seemed to subside,

She thought of how she must have hurt him.

Within conscious of a throbbing pain

He started his car, feelings he tried to hide.

Yes, laterI will call yet

What had his words meant?

A green light, shouldI drive away?

No, I have to see him but what willI say?

She started her car.

Wait, I can't she has to know

ThatI loved her before I go.

She slowed, it's green but why have they stopped?

A car had hit him from the side.

Tears seered through her eyes,

She blinked before they would start again,

Strangely they did not seem to subside.

She will never know what he had tried to hide

Or that it was for her he had died...

Submitted: June 21, 2007

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Chicka19

awww that's so sad. I liked the form and the diffrent ways you did it. his/hers. wonderful job. :)

Thu, June 21st, 2007 7:45pm

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thanks i really appriciate your comment. I was worried that people would think it was too confusing ;0)

Fri, June 22nd, 2007 7:50am

EdwardJBradleySr

lesslikemi:

Well written. Interesting presentation as well. Liked the back and forth between the two perspectives.

Good job. Liked it. A lot.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Fri, June 22nd, 2007 12:54am

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Thanks a lot. I'm glad you like it.

Fri, June 22nd, 2007 7:52am

Kate

I like the alternating stanza thing, it's good. well written and sad, but possibly inspiring people to say what they feel as they feel it xxx

Fri, June 22nd, 2007 3:04pm

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Strangly even though i wrote it i still find it hard to say what i feel, but i guess that's human nature.

Fri, June 22nd, 2007 8:54am

PURE INSANITY

I believe this poem focuses more on the loss of love rather than life. Yet another good poem giving one insight on life.

Sat, June 23rd, 2007 11:54pm

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You're right it is about the loss of a loved and never getting a chance to say the things you want to because its too late, very insightful ;)

Tue, June 26th, 2007 9:16am

xxemoxbfsxx

i hope thats not a true story cus it is very sad. sad= good. so i liked it. thanks for writing.
peace out.___xxemoxbfsxx___

Sat, January 5th, 2008 6:19am

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the whole poem is more a metaphor of how anger comes quickly and passes just as fast yet the results of it can be permanent.. as for it being a true story i guess you'll never know ;).

Sat, January 5th, 2008 12:57am