A MASSACHUSETTS TALE

YoungButExperienced

I absolutely loved it. Great horror story, well written, good job creating an air of mystery about it all. Also, good job leaving it at a mysterious but at the same time somewhat conclusive cliffhanger. I know you usually don't continue stories like this, but I'd still like it if you made a 'chapter two' to explain how and why Maurice was killed.

Lionel Walfish

Good to hear from you,YoungButExperienced.
Your great comments about my writing, always appreciated.

Perhaps I should have gone into more detail, regarding the ending.

When hammering the nail into the stone, Maurice hammered the ends of his long scarf into the stone as well, and when he turned to walk away, his scarf caught at his neck and choked him to death.

Give it another read, and see if it works for you.

Jason Crager

Very impressive. Well written and creepy. It is your style and talent that will keep me reading future work. Some write entertaining stories with little emphasis on proper use of words and language. You have combined the two. A great ability to have.

Lionel Walfish

Ronin, your words are so encouraging, and well thought out. Thank you!

unmasked delusions

This is completely chilling, a beautiful horror story with descriptions that make me jealous as writer. The suspense was great. The ending was simple yet deep, what a tragic accident.

hullabaloo22

Wow, that was seriously creepy, Lionel. I could feel the atmosphere in that cemetary. And poor Maurice, he'd been so brave about the challenge.
BrilIiant!