A Voice in Rum

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Non-Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

Just another therapy session with a glass of rum. This is not related to me..at least, the drinking part.

Alcohol, and especially rum, has always found a way of evoking all sorts of emotions within me that I would normally never come across with. It has a rather odd ability of making me appreciate the beautiful things in life, like oneself. Maybe I should do this more of often; maybe I should just get a different bottle of some Caribbean rum every night, lay in the middle of my lounge, gaze at the ceiling and simply ponder on nonsense; maybe then I'll understand myself a little better.

I layed down in the middle of my lounge for about an hour before I realized it was time to get up, get dressed and finish that glass of rum that had been staying there next to me, asking me to drink it; I couldn't just leave it there, the poor fella' was halfway through and besides, I had to give the devil his due. But before all that, before I returned to the boring ways of sobriety, I had given some thought to the meaning of writing..or at least, to the meaning of my writing. Why did I write? Was it a method of coping with some sort of problem? No, that was definitely not it; I'm a sixteen year old boy that goes to a private school and lives in a middle-to-upper class neighbourhood, I have no real problems. Then, was it to understand myself? No, I know who I am and what I'm made of, and if I ever feel like I don't, I know of a drink that might help. Was it out of obligation? No; I don't take any "creative writing" courses at school and hardly anyone, including my parents, knows that I write. In fact, my girlfriend just found out a couple of days ago.

I was hopeless. After asking myself so many questions, I gave up, seeing that the answer to all of them was an unfortunate, but justified "No". That's when I think I figured it out. It was something so many people around the world fought for every day and yet, for some bullshit reason, I've been giving the opportunity to enjoy it as much as I want: it was a voice. A voice made up of ink and a dedicated will to convey all sorts of emotions, desires, hopes, pains, and joys that I experience.

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Submitted: April 08, 2012

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Bill Rayburn

Just read it, H.

First of all, chill some on the drinking. You're sixteen, got a girlfriend, a nice upbringing (or so it sounds like it), and the rest of your life to explore the wonders, and evils, of alcohol. My only warning: do NOT romanticize drinking. Down that road lies trouble. Drinking can be a double-edged sword. That being said, here's a toast to you, a young writer who seems brave enough to write about personal shit, to expose yourself, to lay open the vulnerable part of your soul for all to see. That is part of what makes a good writer. \_/ \_/ Cheers!

It's a good idea to try to figure out WHY you are writing. But, and it's a big BUTT, don't dwell on it this early in your "career". It's ok to define it, but then let it go. You want the landscapes in your mind and imagination and soul to be boundless. No fences. You are a free-range chicken with a keyboard. Let it flow.

I like the sentence that begins "A voice made up of ink..." Of course, you are going to write about your "troubles, emotions, desires, wishes, dreams, hopes, fears, pains and joys". That is the well from which you will always pull your material. You can write about them verbatim, which you mostly do in this piece, or more obliquely, as you did in your devil/dream piece.

Technical critique: still using too many words to say things that could easily be said in less words. One good way to be aware of that is to always re-read your stuff multiple times, slowly. "Feel" the sentence as you read it...this will help you eliminate words that aren't necessary.

You are starting out with the right approach, in my opinion, H. Spill your guts. It's not only a good way to write, it's a good way to live.

On to the next.

Sun, April 8th, 2012 3:30pm

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Personal note: I don't drink that much. I'm sure it seems like it but trust me on this, I don't. I'll try not to romanticize it and keep my feet held steady on the ground. Technical Approach: F- me, guess I'll re-read it an eliminate some words. Thanks again for reading and commenting Bill! Appreciate it!

Sun, April 8th, 2012 10:32am

xXCapriSunXx

Hey there. So I just wanted to say that I like this because I like intimate posts about thoughts. However, I just felt the need to say something because my dad is an alcoholic and he started drinking when he was sixteen. He said it wasn't that much back then, really. Usually only on holidays or at parties. But trust me, you do NOT want that sort of life, it ruins everything. Now, I might just be overreacting and stuff. But I just don't want that to happen to you is all. But besides that, i like your thought process throughout this entry :) keep writing. Much love, Shannon

Mon, April 9th, 2012 5:41am

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I'm sure you're overreacting, but thanks for your concern. Thank you for your feedback, it is much appreciated.

Sun, April 8th, 2012 10:52pm

bobbie99

Hello, I liked this it is very private and well put. I appreciate that you opened up your private life and did it so gracefully in words . I look for ward to reading more of your writings. :)

Fri, April 20th, 2012 1:09pm

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Well thanks. I'm glad you are! Appreciate the feedback.

Fri, April 20th, 2012 2:34pm

girly1986

Thu, May 3rd, 2012 5:39am

girly1986

I am jealous because you write so well, I can't do that. Why? haha

I wish I am like you... :D not in terms of alcohol though - in writing! ;D

Thu, May 3rd, 2012 5:41am

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I do? Thanks :] I'll try and read your work to see if I can comment, but I'm sure you write well.

Fri, May 4th, 2012 12:30pm

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