Forever loving

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

A different kind of love.

I just want you to know

That my feelings never subsided

No matter how much I tried to act like I didn't care

And how I much I tried to hide it

But the love between us was one sided

And at the start, I did try to fight it

But the war was impossible

Someone had to surrender

So I put down my swords

Pulled my guns apart and did it ever so tender

'Cause the pain for you was raw

My internal wounds are still sore

Hidden by a front Which left their back at loves door

And I ain't one to bore or procasanate about what I never had

But when I fell for you

Damn I didn't just graze my knee on unrequitted loves sidewalk

'Cause I fell bad

And ain't it sad how you offer your heart to the greatest

But the realities always the fakest

Because fairy tales, and happy ever afters

Are only for the movie makers


Submitted: April 12, 2012

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iola ried

Awesome write, love it!

Sun, May 13th, 2012 5:24pm


Thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed it x

Sun, May 13th, 2012 7:37pm


It's a sad poem. I like it. Thank you for sharing. :)

Sat, February 23rd, 2013 11:30pm


Really well done! You have a very real and emotional style that I like.

Sun, May 26th, 2013 8:36pm


I'm so glad that you enjoyed not one but two of my poems.
Means the world to me :)

Mon, May 27th, 2013 2:36pm


Very nice! You have spoken the words that so many people feel after being rejected or betrayed in love. A very deep and emotional poem of love and hurt. Thanks for sharing it!

Thu, May 30th, 2013 12:42pm

Hisham Addicoat

Consistant ,I like it.Very relaxed style.

Mon, June 3rd, 2013 12:06pm


This is awesome! Love it. You're very impressive when it comes to portraying emotion in writing. Also, I love the part where you talk about how hard you fall by comparing it to a scrape vs. something worse. Well done!

Wed, July 10th, 2013 1:49pm

Stormbird Throneshaker

Most definitely from that place, called the heart.
It gets an(I LIKE IT)from me!!!

Tue, January 21st, 2014 2:56am


I think SkinDeep has said it best here... You have done an amazing job with this... I congratulate you on it's worth & value as a statement about how one should realize the impact one makes on the life, feelings, & emotions of another before one just moves on & starts a new chapter in life...

Tue, February 18th, 2014 9:10pm

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