Tick Tock
The way the world spins,
holds a certain rhythem.
Tick tock.
This goes left,
and that goes right.
Tick tock.
I jump and I fall.
I fall and I land
Tick tock.
Its just the way things go.
The way things work.
Tick tock.
Achild left un-nurtured.
By a busy father.
He hears: Tick tock.
No time for self,
no time for anyone.
Tick tock.
Busy and drained.
Mind never at rest .
Tick tock.
What we've become.
Love diminished, faded.
Tick tock.
No time to care.
Keep your mind on your work.
Tick tock.
Have no life.
Just cry and cry.
Tick tock.
Pressure kills you.
you want to die.
Tick tock.
You cant do that.
Continue to cry.
Tick tock.
I cant accept this answer.
Tell me why.
Tick tock.
Stop the clock.
It is a bomb.
Tick tock.
Waiting to go off.
STOP IT!!!
Tick tock.
We can do it.
We just need to learn.
Tick tock.
A little restraint.
Tick tock.
Alittle control.
Tick tock.
DO IT NOW!
Tick tock.
STOP IT NOW!!!
Tick tock.
Tick tock.
Tick-........
the clock is stopped.
- <3 KT
Submitted: January 21, 2009
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Comments
Very impressive. The flow was good. Tick Tock Tick Tock. Yeah that would really get on my nerves. Great job! Angellynn.
Thu, January 22nd, 2009 5:16am
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thanx, i like the time theme, and having to rush. I would get on my nerves too. lol, thats why it had to stop. lol
- ?KT
Really like the pattern and flow of this - good stuff!
Thu, January 22nd, 2009 9:15am
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thanks!
- ?KT
THIS IS WODERFUL! TICK-TOCK THAT'S HOW WE LIVE TODAY!
Thu, January 22nd, 2009 12:22pm
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We all need to slow down and take two steps back. I've had finals for school this week and have been super busy. Thats where I got the inspiration for this poem. Thanx!
- ?KT
i really liked this piece- has a nice rythm to it:)
Thu, January 22nd, 2009 2:39pm
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thanx, thats what i was aiming for!
- ?KT
Great poem! I love the repetitiveness, nice flow and styling.
Sat, January 24th, 2009 5:49pm
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thanx! HUGS!
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That was different, which is a good thing
I like the way it sped up as it got closer to the end that was a nice touch.
(-Skye-)
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Thanx Skye!
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Repeating Tick Tock through out offered great cohesiveness through the poem. I liked this.
Sun, February 1st, 2009 2:31am
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why thank you! woohoo! go cohesiveness!
Sat, January 31st, 2009 7:21pm
a very interesting concept for a poem. some grammatical errors present and a bit repetitive for me, but an interesting structure nonetheless. nice work, take care, Tiger.
Mon, February 2nd, 2009 1:48pm
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It was meant to be a little repetitive. Thanx for commenting.
Mon, February 2nd, 2009 3:25pm
Different is usually good! Repetition can be good if used in the correct context, here it works very well.
Sun, February 8th, 2009 10:53pm
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why thank you =]
- ?KT
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I really like this. It's interesting. I liked the ending, and it all flows out nicely.
Thu, January 22nd, 2009 2:33amAuthor
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thanx so much. its supposed to start off reading slow, then like picks up pace with an urgency (bomb) so yeah. thanx for commenting!
Wed, January 21st, 2009 6:41pm- ?KT