make me a picture

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

make me a picture

Take a photo,

make me a picture.

dont make it kind!

don't check the lighting,

and forget about my "good side",

i want to see it in cinematic detail,

technicolour, and screaming the truth in stereo.

every line, every vein

every boil, bump and bruise!

i want to see every faded scar and fresh scratch,

i want to see the shadows of yesterday's pangs,

and the blood-shot glazed stare of tomorrows fears.

lay me bare,

open me up,

rattle me empty,

drink me dry,

eat every last crumb,

and when theres nothing left.... shoot


Submitted: August 27, 2012

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optimysticynic

I saw your fan request so I wanted to check you out. I'm glad I did. this is extremely well written. the idea is original and very well executed

Mon, August 27th, 2012 9:15pm

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Coming from you - based on what I’ve seen of your work - that is a massive compliment. Thanks for dropping by

Mon, August 27th, 2012 2:23pm

Benyoucef

It's very hard to take such a modern aspect of our lives and write about it, but the way you did it was just creative !! I'm gonna check out your other poems, you just got yourself a fan.

Tue, August 28th, 2012 8:54am

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Thank you, it was hard to get started on this but the idea had been there for a while so once I actually started it seemed to fall into place with relative ease... a rare thing for me. Thanks for reading and commenting

Tue, August 28th, 2012 2:12am

dibbledabble

A well aimed kick in the balls of societies obsession with perfection. This poem is yet another statement on society, but also an insight into the writer.

Thank you for all your poems todate, I will read more

Dibs

Wed, August 29th, 2012 7:16am

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People construct facades, and then wonder why no one knows them. There is beauty in imperfection, and wisdom to be gained from observing it.
Thank you for commenting

Wed, August 29th, 2012 2:48am

bobthebuilder

You obviously put a lot of thought into your work. I really like this one.

Mon, March 18th, 2013 12:33am

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I tend to give things a lot of thought before hand; the writing its self is sometimes done in a bit of a “by the seat of your pants” fashion, but it’s usually after the idea has percolated first for some time.. I generally have to feel like I have something invested in it for it to be worth sharing.
Thanks for reading and commenting, it is much appreciated
Luke

Mon, March 18th, 2013 1:26pm

DivineDevil

I love this. Its like you want to show the truth of your self. But, then again I could be completely off.

Wed, October 2nd, 2013 2:03pm

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No, you’re right on target. This is all about the truth of self and not wanting people to base conclusions on nothing but appearance. We are who we are, good parts and bad.. And it is only when we accept that and pull down the façade that we start to know ourselves and each other. Thank you for reading. and for the wonderful compliment you left on the friend request. Luke.

Wed, October 2nd, 2013 7:14am

Desilu

Being a keen amateur photographer,I enjoyed both the literal and the figurative expression in this poem.
We photographers often argue about editing images and the difference between graphics and photos.
Nowadays we can make perfection in Photo Shop.
I prefer to keep photos natural,so that what is shown is an accurate record of what was photographed.
I love this poem,it really resonates with me.
Dee.

Sun, October 6th, 2013 11:28am

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I completely agree Dee; at what point does the photo become a graphic and to what degree is it acceptable to edit... of course a Photo is a tool and like any tools there are different ones for different jobs and thus editing is part of it all (literally and the figuratively speaking here) but when the job is self examination or expression surely the light of day alone should be all that adds value to the picture. I’m pleased you like it, thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Luke

Sun, October 6th, 2013 10:26am

Shannan Browne

VERY Grotowski - go for it!

Fri, October 25th, 2013 8:09am

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im not overly familiar with him but i am aware of the general concepts behind his work and I can see what you mean... interesting comment, thank you

Fri, October 25th, 2013 5:19am

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