What Hides In The Pure Hearted

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Booksie Classic

The pure hearted princesses has something hidin with inher very core

The pure hearted princesses sacrifices her heart in order to save her loved ones and planet. Offering blood and her pure heart to the demon with in her, Innocent dark red sheds on her in her good name. Demons come to rejoice her coming even her father her transformation occurs as her loved ones fade away. Tainted blood course through her veins as she takes shape she becomes what she most despise. She is the darkest deepest evil out their,the beauty that kills.Eyes deep enough to suck everything in them, attracts the screaming souls of the people. With her brother she will rule all over the universe, that is with in her nature. She well take what she wants then send it to her father to feed on. Her pure heart, feelings, soul,and humanity, all locked up. Only for her father to choice what to do with them at the time. But even if she had them what would become of her. This her destiny she knows it theirs no turning back now. She is Blue Ivy


Submitted: April 03, 2012

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I feel like this should be part of something more, like a long story instead of jsut a short part. It was nice. There are though quite a few lines in here that don't make sense, or need a comma or that are typos. Like, "Demons come to rejoice her coming..." that line should have a couple of commas or be split up or something like that, it was a bit confusing the way it is. It just needs a few tweaks to make it a bit more readable.
Saying all that though, it was a nice short story, and I quite liked the second last line and what it held.

Tue, April 3rd, 2012 6:47am

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thank you for the tips

Wed, April 18th, 2012 4:43pm

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