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The Storm

I walked into the department store just five minutes before the store closed, with my head down as always, and shut the door behind me, trying to keep out the cold. It had begun to snow softly and on my way to the store. What a wonderful way to die!

I, Jesse Montgomery am a depressed 20 year old man, my life is a shambles and I was lonely and giving up. I needed to be gone, I can’t take living anymore. All I needed was some rope and a damn bench! I had leant the damn thing to my cousin a couple months before and surprise, surprise! I still don’t have it back. I knew it’d be suspicious going into the store in broad daylight to buy rope and a footstall.

Whoever was on patrol would probably call the police on me and have me put on 24 – hour suicide watch. So I decided to go at night when the douche bags were put on patrol and barely gave a fuck what happened. He walked in with his head down, like always. Other than the fact that he thought he was an abomination and that he was going to hell, he also believed that he was ugly, which was far from the truth. He was absolutely beautiful. He had a kind of feminine touch to his facial features that made him look...sweet. His eyes were a very, very pale blue and sometimes people thought they were grey. His lips were full and red and his skin was very lightly tanned.

I looked down all the aisles and came to the conclusion I was the only one there as I could hear the manager or whoever in the back room moving around. “Yes! Oh cool, they have rope and benches in the same aisle; I’m toootally coming back here sometime...Oh, right ha-ha...” I had only really come to the conclusion that I would be dead in a couple of hours, probably quicker if I didn’t have to deliver those letters. I at least owed everyone an explanation for my unexpected suicide.

I walked over to the counter, struggling a little bit with everything I had in my hands. I dumped them on the counter and looked up to see...nobody. “Hello!” I called angrily. A man stumbled out and looked a little flustered as he walked clumsily to the counter, of course not before tripping on the air that surrounded him. No really! He tripped...OVER NOTHING!%$&^! “Hey, um sorry, how can I help ya dude?” He said, and then looked up. When he did, we both gasped. The man behind the counter was stunning. He had a dark tan that didn’t exactly look like a tan but more like he was partly Hispanic. He looked quite tall, maybe 6 ft. His eyes were a warm honey hazel colour and his lips were pink and looked so soft. His mouth now lay open as he stared at me from across the counter.

Ricky, that was his name, stared at the boy behind the counter with his mouth open. He felt himself start to drawl and shut it closed with a snap. Then he began to blush, he had tripped over on his way and could have sworn the hottie had laughed at him. Yoo Well! He may think I am comical, he said to himself. The boy wasn’t his type, he normally went with men as butch as himself but this boy was smaller and softer and looked almost fragile. Somebody you would take care of and nurture. The longer Ricky stared the longer he felt like he had to. Like he had to care and nurture this boy for the rest of his life. It was mad because they hadn’t said one word to each other yet...but he couldn’t help it. This guy was so damn cute.

“Oh...um...these.” I squeaked out lamely. I blushed madly but the guy behind the desk, nametag read: Ricky – cute! – Just gave me a heart stopping smile in return but when he saw the items I wanted to purchase, it fell from his face like snow from the sky in a blizzard. My sudden attraction to Ricky was put on hold; Ricky obviously wouldn’t try on a guy like me so he’d better not ruin it for me.

“Look...just give me the shit okay? I’ll- I’ll give you a hundred instead of fifty. Just give’um to me and forget about it dude.” Ricky shook his head.

“No way in hell! What the hell?!” He shouted, pointing at the rope and stool in front of him. For some reason Ricky seemed angry...who gave a fuck. I wasn’t going to let an idiot like him ruin my plans. I’d just grab ‘em and run.

Just as Jesse thought this, lightning struck and hit the gigantic hammer that stood about 30 feet over the department store. The two stood horrified and watched as it began to creak and wobble.

I felt myself being tugged. It was Rick! He was pulling me over the counter and I momentarily paused my fear to savour the feeling of being in his arms. He pulled a door shut just as the giant hammer smashed into the store, exactly where the two of us had been standing.

It was silent for a while, other than our heavy breathing, until it began to rain heavily. The wind threatened to pull open the door and Rick tried his best to hold it for a second. If he didn’t hold on he would be dragged out into the mess and probably be killed. We could hear things smashing about in the store and dreaded to even think what was flying about out there.

“Here!” I pushed a heavy desk on front of the door and Ricky let go of the handle breathing heavily. “Thank (gasp for breath) you (another gasp for breath).”

I nodded in response. Ricky walked over to the window and when he turned back his eyes were wide. “Is it that bad?” He nodded. “I’ve seen a couple cars crashed and one houses roof is half of. Thank God this place is made of sturdy bricks.” He said, banging his knuckles into the wall, and then shaking it out in pain and stuffing them into his mouth and sucking them. “Ahahah!” I laughed loudly at him and he soon joined in. “Look, the point is we’re going to be in here until the storm settles. Might as well get to know each other, huh?” I gulped and watched his strong hips gyrate as he strode towards me.

“Why would you want to do that?” I said, luckily for me, no squeaks. He smiled and sat down on the big desk beside me and slowly pulled me between his spread legs. My heart began to beat double time as I looked up into his honey coloured eyes. They were warmed and filled with...

“Well,” Ricky started. “It’s not every day that you meet someone as beautiful and misunderstood as you are.” He smiled at me and I blushed madly as I looked down, trying to hide my fast colouring cheeks from him. He laughed at me and I looked back up at him with question in my eyes. His arms had already found their way around my thin waist and he pulled me even closer.

I got braver and wrapped my arms around his neck and felt a spark fly up my back and a warm feeling fill my chest. I couldn’t breathe and I felt myself falling slowly in his two pools of warm honey. His lips softly touched mine and I gasped. I pulled back and looked at him. He smiled at me and kissed me softly again. I smiled. I was in love with this guy, I knew it, it’d pretty much knocked me off my feet. I thought back over what he said and slowly started to blushed before confusion took over.

“Whadaya mean “misunderstood”?” He smiled at me. “Whada I mean? I mean you don’t understand.” He said laughing at the frustration on my face. (his laugh was so cute, but also sexy. It was all raspy like...it was cute too because it was like a five year olds laugh, all rushed and chaotic.)I ignored the thunder that shook the ground but clutched harder to Ricky. He looked around us; it seemed we had both forgotten about the storm. It also seemed the storm was getting worse. I was scared but knew that if I kept my thoughts trained on Rick, I’d be okay. I knew he’d protect me.

“I got that!” I said in answer to his reply. He had only met me ten minutes ago and already knew how to push my buttons.

“What don’t I understand?” He looked at me seriously.

“You don’t understand a lot of things. You don’t understand the grief and sadness you will cause for your family and friends; no matter what you think they will always love you. It’ll kill them to know their own son has taken his life!”

His voice...it sounded disappointed. I guess that’s what got me the most, the fact that he was disappointed. I lowered my head like a toddler being scolded for bad behaviour. He lifted my head with his pointer finger and looked me in the eyes.

“You don’t understand the importance of life either. God made the world to be a certain thing and for certain things to pan out. When people unexpectedly kill themselves, it messes up the plan God made in the beginning. And what about all those people who have died in accidents who wanted to live. I swear to ya, if they ever saw you in Heaven they’d kick your ass for sure! See now, God doesn’t want you to die. That’s why I was on this particular shift. Not mine! I just so happened to be covering for a friend who by the way is a douche who would let anything happen. I think that may also mean we are meant to be.” I nearly fainted.

“Besides that, you never give up! Never! No matter how hard your life is! You just don’t! That’s one other thing that you need to learn. Never give up!”

By this time tears were running down my face and I nodded. He was right. Everything he said was right. God, I’m so selfish.

“I’m sorry. I’m so sorry.” I broke down and began to sob into his shoulder. He held me in his arms. “Don’t worry baby, you understand now.” I stopped crying and smiled through my tears and leant up to look into his eyes. “Baby?” I asked. He smiled and said, “Well, I want you to be my baby and anyways...I don’t actually know your name.”

I stared at him silently for a second and he stared back. And then we burst out in hysterical laughter that was cut short by a loud bang. Something smashed into the door. “Oh my God! My name is Jesse by the way.” He jumped of the desk and suddenly grabbed me and kissed me. “I love you Jesse.” I smiled. “I love you too Ricky.”

Then it fell. The ceiling fell and I screamed. Ricky pushed me to the floor and lay over me, protecting by body from the bricks. I screamed and cried and told him no but he lay there, motionless on top of me, taking each brick as they came.

Then it stopped. The falling stopped but Ricky didn’t move off of me. I realised the whole storm had stopped. I carefully moved him off of me and screamed. His eyes were closed and his body was cut and bruised and broken and he didn’t move an inch or even twitch. I climbed onto his body screaming, “WAKE UP! WAKE UP BABY PLEASE! I LOVE YOU!”

His eyelashes fluttered open. “I-I love you t-too Jesse, baby. I- ...Goodbye baby. Promise me not t-to do anything stupid. I- I lo-” His eyes closed.

“NO! Please baby wake up please. I promise I won’t do anything, just wake up please.” I sobbed. It was too late. I knew I had lost him.


Submitted: February 16, 2010

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Soory The Wriitings messed up AGAIN! I think Its my lappy. next time I'll use my comp.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 1:00am

little emo angel

wow, amazing start to it, its nice to see how ricky changes his mind about suicide, but then....dies, thats rather unfortunate, he dies right?....naaw!
great story and thanks 4 updating me :)

Tue, February 16th, 2010 1:50am


Lool, yes Ricky does die and your welcome

Tue, February 16th, 2010 6:54am


omg i cried

Tue, February 16th, 2010 9:23am



Tue, February 16th, 2010 6:53am

Sara Blake

NO!! It was so sad!! Whaa!!

Tue, February 16th, 2010 12:04pm



Tue, February 16th, 2010 6:52am


It made me cry. I love it

Tue, February 16th, 2010 9:11pm


Aww, thanks! I must admit...I cried a bit too!

Tue, February 16th, 2010 5:10pm


intense. I liked it :)

Tue, February 16th, 2010 11:13pm


Thank you!

Tue, February 16th, 2010 5:09pm


Awww, cool story, sad though :( anyway keep up the good work :)

Wed, February 17th, 2010 11:02am


thanks xD

Wed, February 17th, 2010 7:39am


Lovely story, I must say ur stories r alwayz entertaining but I was wondering why u alwayz make it sad in the end?? Do u not believe in happy endings ;)

Wed, February 17th, 2010 10:31pm


:) Sometimes such things don't exist...

Wed, February 17th, 2010 3:20pm


Uh huh not true ;) u just have to believe in things for them to come true :D

Thu, February 18th, 2010 4:17pm


If you say so hon !

Thu, February 18th, 2010 10:01am


This was touching, truely! It was sweet, but the ending was sad, expecially when you didnt expect one. I always love same sew romance! i think they are just so sweet and touching!! :) And I can relate to the whole sucicide thing.

Sat, February 20th, 2010 4:24am


Oh no! You shouldn't relate...*shakes head disappointedly*

Sat, February 20th, 2010 6:26am


OMG thats really good :)
and im not just saying that it is :PP

Sun, February 28th, 2010 10:44pm


lol thank you

Mon, March 1st, 2010 9:25am


WOW! i really loved this!it was so meaningful.. and i loved the ending.. (coz maybe i don't believe in happy endings "/) i'm gonna read more of your works ;D

Fri, March 19th, 2010 8:16pm


Wow...thanks . Means a lot . Lots of love xx

Sat, March 20th, 2010 11:13am


Wow, i loved it, the detail especially, good job!

Sun, March 28th, 2010 3:02pm


Thank you x

Sun, March 28th, 2010 2:54pm



Mon, April 5th, 2010 6:40pm


Thank you

Mon, April 5th, 2010 2:46pm


wow. so sad. filled with intense emotion and a valuable lesson. lovely.

Tue, April 6th, 2010 5:49pm


Thank you nice person.

Tue, April 6th, 2010 1:49pm


U freakin douche.....You made me cry!I loved it!!! Its just so sweet gawd!!!

Mon, April 19th, 2010 3:24pm


Lol I cried too if I must admit.

Tue, April 20th, 2010 9:30am


that is so so so sad!!!

Tue, April 20th, 2010 2:54pm



Tue, April 20th, 2010 9:35am


Had to read it agian treust me i tend to do this if i like something a scene in a book, a movie, a short story!!!

Fri, April 23rd, 2010 3:15pm


Lol I am glad you like it.

Fri, April 23rd, 2010 4:08pm


i enjoyed that u wrote it or posted it on my birthday, but it went extremely fast. i think u need to go back and expand it. the intro was great but then it sudenly flies by and it ruined the whole thing! extend their conversation... maybe have a revealing of both of them. laughter... it just seems to quick! great concept!

Sat, April 24th, 2010 6:57am


Yeah well it being quick was the whole point really. It's only a short story anyway.

Sat, April 24th, 2010 4:56am


Read it agian hey, i would really appriciat your help chooseing a title for my new book?!

Mon, April 26th, 2010 2:59pm


Oh okay, I couldn't find it :/

Mon, April 26th, 2010 9:13am

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