Perception of the Unknown

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The 15 days is up and i should have revealed the description of this poem yesterday but i was so tired that i slept.lol. Soz. I wrote a whole essay on it when i was trying to write on a paragraph to explain what i meant so if u want read that, comment and let me know and i will upload it. So here is my simplified description of the poem:

The concept of this poem is based on the idea of the after-life; something that is UNKNOWN to the living(us). I had comments about this poem being about heaven or hell. In a way you are right as stanza 8 clearly shows but the colours and the imagery in this poem are an illustion to make the reader think like that. HOWEVER, this poem is about the first stage in the after-life that every soul must visit. If it was about heaven or hell then the ideology of '...beauty and horror... regret' and pain existing in the same place is a factual imposibilty. The narrator feels all these things at the same place, immediately eliminating the idea of the place being heaven. In a way, this poem is about re-birth in two a new world that is unknown to us as stanza one clearly shows.

Hope the blurb sort of makes sense. I go more in depth in the essay so comment yes or no if u want me to upload. ^_^

If this is ur first time of reading it, i hope u enjoy it and please comment. ^_^


P.S. the cover picture is from http://a52.g.akamaitech.net/f/52/827/1d/www.space.com/images/030627_aurora_unknown_04.jpg therefore, i reserve no right to it.

PERCEPTION OF THE UNKNOWN
By: Adwoa G. Darko
Darkness,
Light,
Wind,
Heat,
Whispers!

The midnight blue sky is covered with full moon stars.
The sudden stillness of the wind frightens me.
Hollowness outweighs me;
The brightest of light blinds me.

Colours of beauty are all I see.
Greenery at last!
The wind unfreezes and blasts me from left to right;
It is not harsh nor friendly.

Whispers of confusion,
Whispers of welcome,
Whispers of anger,
Whispers of evil joy.

Calmness settles in the wind.
The greenery calms my confused mind.
Stares shimmer in and out of sight,
I begin to tremble.

Solid features of the old and young surround me.
The weirdest of smiles welcome me.
To some, my appearance is a total surprise
But others have “I’m so glad you are here” smiles.

It is not clear what my mind perceives.
There is no sun or moon,
No sea or the chirpings of birds,
Just beauty and horror in simplicity.

Whispers ... no, screams!
Agonising fear is the tale of their screams.
Sudden enlightenment and total regret
Is part if their story.

I cannot save them.
The screams fade out
And the experience of the timeless horror,
Blanks out of my mind.

The wind welcomes me with its acceptance.
The most amazing music is whistled in the air.
Breath, I have none;
Taste, I do not need.

Clarity at last!
I could have never perceived immaculately the reality of the unknown
Crazy thoughts consumed my tasteful living
What an eccentric cross-over this is.

Pain and fear exist no longer.
It’s tasteless but intriguing.
Doubts, I have none
But it cannot be mistaken,
I never had any idea.


Submitted: November 20, 2009

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Mistress of Word Play

I read this several times and thought how beautiful it was. There are a few typos but not enought to detract from the write. I thought first maybe a bat, but that made no sense. Vampire is wrong as well. Then I thought of death or a spirit of some sort that would fit the best of all I thought of. Whatever you are describing it was certainly awe inspiring. It got my attention. So glad you had me come read this, I love and hate riddles so. Great job. Susan :)

Fri, November 20th, 2009 11:50pm

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Thank u so much Susan and thanks for pointing out the spelling mistakes. ^_^

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:30pm

Marlena

I like how you go from sudden peacfullyness to terror and pain. Some reason it reminds me of death or someone dying... there is no more fear or pain. I enjoyed reading it :)

Sat, November 21st, 2009 2:05am

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lol. Am sort of weird like that. Thanks for commenting. ;D

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:27pm

guitarplayer

Wow, this is beautiful! I love the variety of words you use, and you have a really good way of twisting them to fit your meaning!
Really good :)
becoming a fan!
x

Sat, November 21st, 2009 10:40am

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lol. Thank u so much. ;D

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:26pm

jerique

Woah! I had to read it more than twice. Two sides of each emotion are described. It appears to me that you are trying to describe something you do not know - the UNKNOWN. I liked the transition and the contrasts.

Sat, November 21st, 2009 11:47am

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Thank u. And u are right, if u read the poem really carefully, although the narrator is trying explain his/her feeling and perceptions, he/she doesn't really know what is going on. All he knows is that he is dead and the place he is at is not permanent. Good thinking. :)

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:24pm

Graeme Montrose

Amazing piece of work, it is a beautiful poem and intriguing riddle. Despite the spelling errors it is fantastic. As I began to read through it the first six stanzas gave me the thought it was a snowflake, but then the tone and descriptions changed so I realised it could not be. So then I thought well maybe it is a ghost traversing the world, or a spirit of some sort or other. Then also since it said it never had doubts ever, so well maybe it is death itself, welcomed by some feared by some, claiming old and young, fearing none, but then again you talk of tasteful living and crossover? So maybe not death after all! So maybe it is a vision or a spiritual trip and crossover into the spirit world, or else it is just a departed spirit! Ha! Now all that to say you write a fantastic piece here, I will look forward with great anticipation your answer! All the best in your future writing projects.

Sat, November 21st, 2009 12:15pm

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Thank u so much. I hope i don't dissapoint u. lol. ^_^

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:19pm

UnderxYourxSpell

Well, I'm terrible at this sort of thing but I'll give it a go. I had to read it several times before I really started to form any interpretations but I finally got the feeling this was about death in some way. Sorry, I can't really offer more than that - I'm really not good at interpretations :D Amazing poem though! I loved the contrasts. I know people have mentioned about the spelling errors, but I just noticed that 'non' should be 'none'. Great work :)

Sat, November 21st, 2009 3:17pm

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Thank u so much. U guess was right. ;D

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:17pm

madaGDarko

Hi guys, I'm itching so much to tell u what the poem is about. I physically cannot wait for 30 days so let's make it 15 days from now. And to those of u that guessed correctly, i always keep my promise; u'll know when i visit ur work. Please keep commenting and enjoy.

P.S. Am aware of the spelling mistakes, it was about 1a.m. when i wrote this poem but thank u for pointing it out though. ^_^.

Sat, November 21st, 2009 11:56pm

huckleberrychan

WoW!!! That was an amazing poem! Great job XD

Sun, November 22nd, 2009 2:40am

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Thank u. ;D

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:15pm

Nacre Aura

Is it about a new visitor to heaven?...i love it absolutely.Dunno whether u have read '5 PPL U MEET IN HEAVEN'. I CAN RELATE the book with ur poem..or rather the other way round...i might be wrong though.

Sun, November 22nd, 2009 4:39pm

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No, i haven't read the book. i will check it up though. Sounds interesting. You are really close though. Read the blurb and get the description of the poem. Thank u for commenting. :)

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:15pm

nell b

Wow.. So very intriguing! I too had to read this several times, to begin with it made think of maybe a car accident and passing to the afterlife, not necessarily a person but maybe an animal hit by a car?! But then on second reading I had an image of birth...'darkness, light, wind, heat, whispers..'... but again I get the impression its from an animals' perspective... maybe taken in as a pet, and later abandoned? I could be completely way off here, I've never been very good with riddles, but have to say well done on a fantastic piece, and I cant wait to hear the answer! :)

Sun, November 22nd, 2009 11:49pm

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I like that u have that image of birth. Not many people realised that. Apart from being about the after-life, it is first and foremost, the rebirth of a soul into a new life or world. :)

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:11pm

KyrieWasHere

I liked it :)
I think it's about the pain of dying, and then the calmness of death, and then the peaceful afterlife.

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 12:54am

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That's a really good thought. Interesting. However, everything that happened in the poem is about the after-life. Thanks so much for commenting. ^_^

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:08pm

mommy3

I enjoyed reading this and liked it very much. I think it might be about that someone died and is talking about the afterlife. Or it could be someone's perception on being a ghost or an angel. Not really good with riddles. thanks for letting me know about this written piece. :)

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 3:14am

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U are welcome. U r absolutely spot on with ur second statement. Good job. ;D

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:05pm

nell b

Ok, I've come up with another thought about this poem... could it be the experiences of an extraterrestrial life form visiting earth? You've certainly got me gripped with this one! :)

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 8:58am

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It the other way round, just that the human would be dead. I love u thought thought, very interesting. :)

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:03pm

ladygothicka

Liked it, really liked it. Gripped me.

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 9:26am

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lol. Thanks. Am glad it gripped u. :D

Mon, December 7th, 2009 1:00pm

EdwardJBradleySr

madaGDarko:

Well written and interestingly presented. Good work.

Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Wed, November 25th, 2009 4:38am

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Thanks Ed. :)

Mon, December 7th, 2009 12:56pm

Ryuzaki

This is amazing. I love your style. How you use color. It was intriguing.

Wed, November 25th, 2009 4:39am

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Thank u. Really appreciated. ;D

Mon, December 7th, 2009 12:55pm

Alex3315

Completely beautiful!. The words in itself took me to a wonderful place, and it was amazing with how it went from peacefulness then pain. It in some ways reminded me of heaven and hell. Such an amazing write!. You definitely have a whole lot of potential!, you definitely have the imagination that amazing writers need to succeed:).

Mon, November 30th, 2009 8:34pm

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I don't don't know what to say. Thank u so much for that compliment. Am so grateful. Please read the blurb and it will tell u what the poem what about. But ur thought are really close though. ^_^

Mon, December 7th, 2009 12:54pm

tastetheblood

Hmm Interesting piece is it about heaven perhaps ? I'm not sure ,I like though

Mon, November 30th, 2009 9:10pm

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No, it's not about heaven but it's a place of mixed feeling, the first stage of after-life. Thanks for reading. ;D

Mon, December 7th, 2009 12:51pm

Cobra Midnight

Very nice. I loved the imagery, you really depicted the surroundings of the narrator quite will (: keep this up, really. It was beautiful!

Tue, December 1st, 2009 4:12am

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Aww, thanks so much. ^_^

Mon, December 7th, 2009 12:49pm

prettylittleliars

wow just read it and i thought it was your best one yet. your an amazing poet. writ more for me, please. lol :)

Thu, December 3rd, 2009 6:04pm

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Always. And thank you for the compliment. Hope i can live up to ur expectations. :D

Mon, December 7th, 2009 12:44pm

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