This is a poem about the eternal joy found at Christmas Time!

Eternal Star

Snow sprinkles on the frost lustered ground.

A dry wind whips particles of sand into the air.

The sky- a curtain of opaque ashen cotton drops.

A sun, hung in the sky, bears down on the earth, a sagging pendant.

A white hand thrusted up against a frosted window pane,

Three pairs of feet trekking through an ocean of sand dunes,

A gaping mouth, a breath, a sigh, a fit of shivers from an adolescent girl.

Three scraggly, black-bearded chins, dark fingers wiping perspiration from brows.

Full lips sealed together, humming an airy melody.

A rising chorus of male voices, united in chant.

Blue iris’s watch families flash by the brilliant red and green light displays.

Bodies push through a crowded bazar.

Then her gaze shifts upward, to the ebony sea, to gaze at the illumination.

Each beady pair of eyes trail the path of the beam of light above.

Light from the single star.

 

A soft smile graces her lips,

Turbaned heads weave through hazes of people.

The hand leaves the window pane and comes to rest on her head.

A stable is in their sight.

Two fingers brush her brow, her collar bone, then her left shoulder, then right.

Panting, the three men stop, and gap at the heavenly sight before them.

“Father, son, holy spirt” She recites.

To a babe swaddled in cloth, and lying in a manger they, present gifts.

God, thank you for the happiness that myself and family felt today.” She thanks the twinkling star.

Gold, frankincense, myrrh, given to the king.

Then, all four pairs of eyes glance up to see,

The star, that lead each one to the key to joyful eternity.


Submitted: December 20, 2015

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tanya bliss

this is a very nice premise and it paints a really nice picture.

Sun, December 20th, 2015 2:56am

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Thank you!!:)

Sat, December 19th, 2015 6:59pm

Tolerance Writer

I also think it is also a nice premise but you used a lot of cliches. Avoid cliches like the plague, Maggie. I'm Catholic!

Sun, December 20th, 2015 4:14am

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Cool, so am I! Ok I will remember that for next time!

Sun, December 20th, 2015 5:33am

Ever A. Darling

The words. The flow. This is an amazing poem, darling. The last few lines were my favorite, especially the last line. Loooooved it. (:

Tue, December 22nd, 2015 12:11am

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Thank you for reading!!

Tue, December 22nd, 2015 8:42am

earlofmarl

As one of the previous comments state there are a lot of clichés. Not necessarily a bad thing for a seasonal poem but they prevent this poem from feeling unique. And it is pretty unique.
Minor points - you don't need the hyphen after sky in the third line. Bazaar not bazar towards the end of the first verse.
Altogether a nice xmas piece.
~EoM

Wed, December 23rd, 2015 7:57pm

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Thank you, I will remember to change those things!

Wed, December 23rd, 2015 1:03pm

Islebabe

This was lovely; a reminder of what Christmas is all about. Thank you or reminding us. Nice work.

Sun, December 27th, 2015 10:34pm

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Thank you!:)

Sun, December 27th, 2015 3:30pm

Rose Burg

The eloquence of your writing really encompassed the message in this poem and it has a very smooth and peaceful flow. It was a lovely read! - Rose Burg xx

Wed, December 30th, 2015 11:18pm

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Thank you!:)

Wed, December 30th, 2015 3:25pm

blueskia

this is lovely, very descriptive and flows nicely. really nice poem :)

Wed, January 20th, 2016 10:35pm

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Thank you!:)

Wed, January 20th, 2016 6:22pm

Eclipse101

This poem is really good and I love it.

Mon, March 21st, 2016 6:23pm

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Thank you!

Tue, March 22nd, 2016 7:51am

Miss Melodramatic

I found the imagery a bit confusing in the beginning -with the snow and the sand one after the other. But after a bit of thought, I understand now. I suggest you put the two surroundings in different paragraphs because getting confused in the beginning will make it hard to appreciate the rest of the poem. And that would be a shame because I think it was pleasant to read.

Mon, March 21st, 2016 8:48pm

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Thank you, I will revise that!

Tue, March 22nd, 2016 7:52am

Kejiiraa12

Beautiful :) Simply breathtaking

Sat, March 26th, 2016 1:34pm

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Thank you

Sat, March 26th, 2016 7:51am

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