Biggest mistake

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

a poem I wrote recently...hope you like it!

To love is to err
and so I'm found guilty
brought on my own torture
if only love had let me be...

It seems my biggest mistake
was having something left to take
one word sealed my fate
my debt was paid
my battle lost
my meek soul battered
nothing left to discuss
except my surrender

My dream was my demise
my hope my reaper
proving comfort for the wise
and death for the dreamer

I draw my breaths shallow body
raked by unseen wounds
in my regret I'm left to wallow
praying life would end soon
for my heart was ripped away
and all that's left is an empty space
my consciousness has gone astray
wandering aimlessly at a frightening pace
back and forth between two moments
the sweet beginning and the bitter end
love now ashes in the wind
dreams that came and went
swiftly in both.. painful nontheless
I reach for the tears in my eyes
proof of my distress
yet I find no visible signs
for my fire has finally died down
slaughtered, taken, torn apart
the day I gave away the crown
to the kingdom of my heart

Submitted: December 16, 2009

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being inlove with somone hurts so much this poem is so true!!!!!!

Wed, December 16th, 2009 11:59pm


it does doesn't it? love is tough :D thanks so much for reading ;)

Wed, December 16th, 2009 7:33pm


wow, i really like this. i love the pace and the choice of words. some lines in there were remarkably beautiful!!!

Mon, December 21st, 2009 5:16am


thank you sooooooooo much!!!! :D :D I love the fact that you like this :D

Mon, December 21st, 2009 5:58am


Hey! Thanks for keeping me updated with your poetry. I truly enjoy your writing. It is always so wrought with emotions and easy to lose myself in. This piece in particular was so raw and bare, just torturous to read. Love is one of the most complex emotions. I like that you explore the many sides of it…and not always the pretty ones.

Do you write from own experience? Just curious because you are able to evoke such pure emotion through your writing. Great job!

Mon, December 21st, 2009 8:37pm


THANK YOU SOOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!!! I'm so glad you like this!!! I really felt this one when I wrote it and I guess it's partly inspired by true experience but the rest just flowed :D
But seriously to have you saying that is like the icing on the cake :D Thank you so so much! And you're very welcome!!

Tue, December 22nd, 2009 6:03am

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