Difference b/w I And Ship

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic


Right now i changed my cover page on face book and just for a while i thought it represent my feelings,


I am alone in this world,
As like a ship in ocean,
My heart is surrounded by emotional waves,
As like a ship is surrounded by ocean waves,
I want to float on it,
As like a ship is floating on it,
My soul wants to express my stormy feelings,
As like a ship is expressing it's in proud way,
But i am help less because no one hears me,
And ship is lucky than me have no emotions but still we hear it,


Submitted: May 31, 2012

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Vikrant

Beautiful use of metaphor. You are very true some of us are like a ship lost in the vast ocean of this world. Tradition which are just like uncontrolled waves are ruling over our lives. Lovely poem.

Thu, May 31st, 2012 8:35am

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Thanks for such a great comment

Thu, May 31st, 2012 1:45am

Ian Dawn

the beautiful part of this is teh choppy english and dont take this the wrong way I love it its like watching a movie that skips a frame or two. the emotion is real and thats all that counts

Fri, June 1st, 2012 8:17am

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no i love when some one told me about my mistakes....Because when they tell you your mistakes so we should improve it....and that's really meant a lot
thank u so much lan dawn

Fri, June 1st, 2012 3:21am

SmileValentine

ok.. sorry for taking too long to have a read.. you're in a wrong timing to send me a reading request, but im here to read :)
anyways, the emotion is properly conveyed.. im not a grammar expert but i think your poems will get better and better.. have to read another one

Fri, June 1st, 2012 12:01pm

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thank you so much for smilevalentine

Fri, June 1st, 2012 8:57am

jmurch

This is one of your best pieces! And you are not alone on this site. The waters may be stormy, but look madame I spot dry land ahead. I think this poem must have been a release for you! I am happy to have found. As an artist, I feel releases like this are art! Thank YOU!

Sat, June 2nd, 2012 9:01pm

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jmurch thank you so much for such nice and warm comment
it's great commen

Sat, June 2nd, 2012 11:13pm

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