I Know You Are Not Mine

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

Whatever comes to my mind

i know u r not mine...
i know we can't be together...
i know distance b/w me & u is on way...
i know thinking of u is useless...
i know everything is ruined...
but why i am still looking for u...
as i know it's not possible...

Submitted: May 24, 2012

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Hi, I don't like the fact that u used b/w in your poem If the reader doesn't know what its for you have lost them. I also think u use ... too many times and it distracts from the flow of the poem. Keep on trying though M

Sat, May 26th, 2012 9:24am


thanks for your comment murnit...
but if everything will be in flow so you will never understand the depth....sometime distraction is important because if author explain each thing in flow so then taste of poem will lost...
but thanks for your great comment i will make it better

Sat, May 26th, 2012 4:12am


There are several things which cause distances between friends but I mainly blame on the rat race of our life. We crave for the best and left behind the one who/which was really made for us. But I think this how our lives go on. Don't want to be philosophical but this another good poem from you. Love this poem.

Sun, May 27th, 2012 8:13am


I am agree with you 100 percent right thinking
Thanks you like my work
am glad :)

Sun, May 27th, 2012 1:15am

Antoine Watson I

First i can respect the fact you take take critcism extremly well. I feel the small things like the... and b/w adds to your creativity and lets us into your thoughts. The....to me meant you were in deep thoght and took a pause to express the net thought. I enjoyed the poem. The most important thing to me in poetry is whether your heart is in it, and i felt yours was.

Tue, June 5th, 2012 5:53pm


Thank you so much Antoine watson it's really an great comment
i really respect your comment

Wed, June 6th, 2012 12:56am

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