Poem by: Maij
love, romance, poetry
Submitted: April 05, 2011
© Copyright 2016 Maij. All rights reserved.
Beautiful :) Great rhyme and imagery. Is the line before the last supposed to be 'hears her thoughts'?
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. Btw: thanks for the heads up :)
another well written "feeling".
I like the sense of longing. This poem is very whimsical. Well done.
Thank you :)
my my. you are one passionate soul. PLEASE keep on writing. you make me want to share more of my poems now. see what you've done? bruce.
Thanks Bruce that means a lot. Its been about two years since I stoped writing and I'm glad that my work can inspire others. Please share your work. After reading a few of your pieces, I am curious about what you may be keeping from us :)
hey!!! what do you mean you stopped writing two years ago? don't you dare! if i can write, even if it's only occationally, so can you. (boy, what a dad i'm sounding like) whatever you have to share i'd like to see it. like i said, you truely have talent, now you just have to keep on trying. I WANT TO SEE YOU GROW! and i am quite flattered that you want to read more of my stuff and i just happen, now that i finally have a couple of days off from work, to plan on posting a silly play of mine and a few more of my poems. hope i can get a bit more of a comment from you than your first. hey, actually, i'll take anything i can get. see ya, Bruce.
Awwww, that was so lovely. So, so lovely. I shall read another now.
Thank you for reading Gideon; I'm happy you enjoyed it. :)
Wow the only word that came up in my mind after reading this is "Cute"!
Yeah this poem is so cute! Fascination, huh? That was a common disease of all the hopeless romantics, like us! (yeah me too! cheers for us!)
Clearly written; carefully selected words (which I guess is NOT intended/toiled, but was spontaneous... I know)
Great imagery, especially when she realized it 'frenzied eyes...' that was top notch!
btw what's "loosing desires hot?" - I think I didn't understand that line...
Thank you so much; I'm happy you liked this poem and yes its meant to be cute, so thank you again :) Hopeless romantic; yeah; that's me?(& I will be stopping in to read the work of my fellow romantic soon :) Thank you so much for your kind and lovely comments. Also, "loosing desires hot" is me saying 'setting their desire loose' which basically alludes to a make-out session haha :) Once again I appreciate the read and comments, Thank you??
secretive,seductive and very sexy,I love it really very beautiful:)
Hey Bobby, Thanks so much for reading; I'm glad you enjoyed this poem! I really appreciate your comments; thank you again :)
Did you remind me of W. Wordsworth? Damn YES you did!
Maij, how could you, I mean, how could you just write poetry so beautifully, so marvellously that one wasn't enough to my heart?
This is one of the best snappy poem I've ever come across in my short life! I actually imagined a place far away, where people aren't aware of the dark, and surprisingly, they never sleep, until a girl goes to bed, and dreams of the one she would marry in the nearing unpredictable future, though knowing that the person can arrive only in her dreams... (See, I'm a terrible daydreamer, a woolgatherer, so don't blame me if I'm boring you!! ^_^)
ROCK 'N' ROLL, Maij!!
Your friend, always,
Hi Willie! Thanks so, so much for leaving such a great comment and for taking the time to read! I loved you interpretive daydream too; inspired! Thank you again :)??
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