Patron

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Rendezvous between patron and courtesan...


Submitted: May 01, 2011

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brucek

hmm. i like it. left a lot for a person to guess at. good job.

Sat, May 14th, 2011 2:30pm

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I'm glad you liked it but I have to ask: When did the guessing begin for you?

Wed, May 18th, 2011 11:47am

brucek

it's the last line that i'm not sure of. i'm probably a litte thick is all.

Thu, May 19th, 2011 1:52pm

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oh, ok. No your not thick, that part is supposed to be up for the readers own interpritation :)

Thu, May 19th, 2011 8:44am

Mezquiteno

Loved it... ;)

Mon, May 30th, 2011 1:11am

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Thank you :) Glad you enjoyed it.

Sun, May 29th, 2011 7:33pm

arun

My fruit is ripe! - I see some dirty thing in there? haha jk...
I didn't read the summary. I read the poem fully and I thought that this was a love scene - a true love. The percentage I'm allowed to keep - though it confused me, I thought maybe it was the pocket money her parents would give.
After seeing the summary and the tags, I somehow understood it. wow... My fav is 'my fruit is ripe.'
Keep writing.
Take care :)

Sat, November 5th, 2011 12:10pm

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Hi Arun
Thanks for reading and commenting. The 'ripe fruit' comment is indeed a sexual allusion. This woman is a prostitute so the percentage she is allowed to keep comment is in regards to the money she makes and what her boss allows her to keep.. So I highly doubt that her parents gave her the money haha :) Thanks again for your comments Arun. I appreciate you taking the time to read and extend your thoughts??

Sat, November 5th, 2011 9:48am

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