Poem by: Maij
love, death, romance, sweet, haiku, kiss
Submitted: May 17, 2011
© Copyright 2016 Maij. All rights reserved.
Awwww, this is sad and sweet. I really liked it.
Thank you :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.
nice. sexy vampire perhaps? will read more of yours soon. promise. read my haikus?
Deff! I love haiku :) may take me a while though cuz I been super busy with these fashionn projects my sister and me have been working on.
Simple, but amazing :)I hint of love and lust in there... very eerie and mysterious! You did really well with your three line limitation!
Thanks, that means alot. I really enjoy writing haiku and its good to hear that someone thinks I'm decent :)
Sounds like a famous quote at the beginning of a first-class novel.
Haha :) I'm glad you think so!
My interpretation is somewhat different: I see a boy/girl dying in the lap of his/her lover, and sharing the final kiss, before giving up his/her ghost... Or maybe like a death bed scenario?
Anyway, I never even imagined that 14 words can be accumulated in so good a way to supply so powerful an emotion! I never can! Beauty!
Lol I can't write Haiku :( *buries face into palms in shame*
btw I think the title must be 'sweet death'
Keep writing sista.
Take care :)
I like your interpretation Arun; I wrote this haiku in such a manner that it could be interpreted in a number of ways. I'm flattered by your positive and thoughtful comments; thank you? And I believe any one can write haiku if they want. I look at the haiku form as somewhat of a puzzle; you have only so many syllables and you must choose your words wisely in order to convey your message. See? Easy :) Thank you, again?
Very seductive but yet touching at the same time. A concoction that is very difficult to portray in a thousand words, so for you to do it in three lines is staggering. I just love your literary eloquence - it's very enticing :)
Thank you Nik :) I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I did intend for this to be a tender poem and I'm glad you felt that way about it. It is written in a way that can be interpreted in many different ways (hence the above comments) and I like that but I like it even more that you understood my original angle/intentention. Thank you for your lovely comments???
Oh my melancholy is personified. Just the way it drains my life source and leaves me in phantom of depression. I love the fluid expression even though I've never kissed before. my lips are also virgins. Am on my knees... Am begging you please teach me this haiku.
Hey Ekeuhie :) Thanks a lot! I really appreciate your reading and leaving such a thoughtful comment. I'm really happy you liked this poem; and if you ever decide to write any haiku of your own, I'd be happy to read and offer my thoughts :)
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