Sweetness death

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Haiku:Kiss


Submitted: May 17, 2011

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Archia

Awwww, this is sad and sweet. I really liked it.

Wed, May 18th, 2011 1:23am

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Thank you :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Wed, May 18th, 2011 11:44am

brucek

nice. sexy vampire perhaps? will read more of yours soon. promise. read my haikus?

Mon, May 23rd, 2011 2:53pm

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Deff! I love haiku :) may take me a while though cuz I been super busy with these fashionn projects my sister and me have been working on.

Tue, May 24th, 2011 1:00pm

arun

My interpretation is somewhat different: I see a boy/girl dying in the lap of his/her lover, and sharing the final kiss, before giving up his/her ghost... Or maybe like a death bed scenario?
Anyway, I never even imagined that 14 words can be accumulated in so good a way to supply so powerful an emotion! I never can! Beauty!
Lol I can't write Haiku :( *buries face into palms in shame*
btw I think the title must be 'sweet death'

Keep writing sista.
Take care :)

Sat, November 5th, 2011 11:43am

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I like your interpretation Arun; I wrote this haiku in such a manner that it could be interpreted in a number of ways. I'm flattered by your positive and thoughtful comments; thank you? And I believe any one can write haiku if they want. I look at the haiku form as somewhat of a puzzle; you have only so many syllables and you must choose your words wisely in order to convey your message. See? Easy :) Thank you, again?

Sat, November 5th, 2011 8:41am

Nik89

Very seductive but yet touching at the same time. A concoction that is very difficult to portray in a thousand words, so for you to do it in three lines is staggering. I just love your literary eloquence - it's very enticing :)

Sat, November 5th, 2011 2:52pm

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Thank you Nik :) I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. I did intend for this to be a tender poem and I'm glad you felt that way about it. It is written in a way that can be interpreted in many different ways (hence the above comments) and I like that but I like it even more that you understood my original angle/intentention. Thank you for your lovely comments???

Sat, November 5th, 2011 10:09am

Ekeuhie

Oh my melancholy is personified. Just the way it drains my life source and leaves me in phantom of depression. I love the fluid expression even though I've never kissed before. my lips are also virgins. Am on my knees... Am begging you please teach me this haiku.

Thu, December 8th, 2011 9:25pm

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Hey Ekeuhie :) Thanks a lot! I really appreciate your reading and leaving such a thoughtful comment. I'm really happy you liked this poem; and if you ever decide to write any haiku of your own, I'd be happy to read and offer my thoughts :)

Thu, December 8th, 2011 5:26pm

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