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Recent Comments
I discussed the story, not the author. The reply used 'you/r' (including one your for you're) 7 times, so the reply was not about the review or about the story, it was about me.
This site is about the writing. It is not about personalities, it is not about name calling. Step back from emotion and focus on what was actually said: The work needs editing and proofreading. Excuses don't matter, other authors' errors don't matter. The work matters.
I love the detail an the interaction between each character it so intriguing I will plan to read chapter three to see what comes next keep up the great work I love your plot and how he makes me twist and turn while reading it
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I meant to say excellent my bad on that misspelling
I think it extellent I do believe that when e do our first draft editing is always the last thing I worry my mind with the space I have in my book keep up the great job I will be watching your book a lot more closely from here on
Erratic proofreading. The whole needs a thorough editing: punctuation, grammar and sense.
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1. There are way worse stories on here grammar wise, that probably need help a lot more.
2. Your profile makes you seem pretty miserable to be on this site. No one is forcing you to read these stories.
3. You could probably be a lot nicer. I get that your critiquing something but that doesn't mean you have to be blunt and rude.
4. How is the weather up there on your high horse?
They have an interesting relationship, I can see. Strangely enough similar to what mine usually are, and Sebastian is an interesting character indeed, but I like him. Another good chapter, nice work.
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Thanks! All my writing is vaguely based on my personal life so I create all my characters around people I know and their relationships off my relationships with them.
Very nice so far. You don't seem like the average internet writer, which is a good thing. You have interesting original and mysterious ideas, and I like that. You write well; it is both detailed and flowing. I hope you continue.
What an exciting start with lots of mystery. These Gods are scary and funny a the same time but Hades and Thor obviously aren't ones to be messed with. Gus seems to think of this as a fun adventure but I think knows there's gonna be trouble ahead. Great start, I love your descriptions of the atmosphere in the room from the fire to the winds and your easy writing style.
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Thanks Nikki! You're pretty perceptive of Gus (Aengus of Celtic mythology) and his views on the situation! I hope you keep reading!
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