My Sanity, It's Gone

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just a stream of consciousness i guess..

I feel it slipping—

Like sand through fingers

On the beach in my soul

Where the tide rages

And birds cannot find

Any food to eat

Because all that was planted

Is rotten

And all that was found

Was forgotten.

I feel it falling—

Like a man from the roof

Of his damnable house

When he feels he cannot

Take it anymore;

Where the birds sing their

Strangled songs

And sinners try to

Right their wrongs.

I feel it sliding—

Like an oil slick

On a gravel road

In the forests of my mind

Where children hide

Their broken smiles,

And jacks and jills

Roll down the hills

And secrets slide

From lips so wide

To ears so near they hear it clear.

I feel it breaking—

Like the dirty windows

In that damnable house

With finger prints

And drawings traced

By finger tips

Upon the panes of glass

Which shutter in the

Windy night

And whisper that it’s

All alright.

I feel it fading—

Like a fire waning

In the night

Beneath the stars

That burn so bright

And in the humid

Summer air

I know that it’s too late

To care;

But I feel it breaking

Snapping, shaking…

My sanity slipping from my grasp

Is getting way too hard to clasp.

It’s gone.

Submitted: March 07, 2012

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I really like this - the flow, the rhythm, the poem itself. I really liked the last three lines in particularly. :)

Wed, March 7th, 2012 8:57pm


thank you very much, i wasn't sure how this one would be received, so im really glad you like it! :)

Wed, March 7th, 2012 1:01pm


Full of drama and imagery, really liked reading this, thanks!

Please chack out my 2 new poems, Axis nad The Tree. I would love your valuable feedback!

Sun, April 29th, 2012 8:06am


my, you do have a way with words! and the way you hold on to your mood is great. some good word combinations. all right! but you don't seem that crazy to me. huh!

Tue, July 17th, 2012 4:50am


haha well thank you! glad to hear you like it

Tue, July 17th, 2012 6:00am


Wow very nice! I really like this poem. I like the way u write. :)

Tue, July 17th, 2012 1:31pm


thanks a lot! :)

Tue, July 17th, 2012 6:46am

Mathew Nicolson

Woah, what a flow. Effortless to read, and the rhyming comes naturally without feeling forced. It's almost too good; the layers of imagery perhaps cloud the underlying theme and message of the poem. But that could just be my lack of understanding. The rhythm is fearsome. I wish I could write poems structured and paced this well :p

Sun, September 30th, 2012 4:42pm


wow thank you!

Sun, September 30th, 2012 11:30am

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