Emental: The Series

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Late comment: another awesome chapter keep up the good work and i like all the characters the is going good :)

Late comment: another great chapter I want to see some action you know what I mean

Late comment: another great chapter will I got to say story is going cool and awesome keep it up :)

Nice Chapter i loved the fight it was cool! keep it up again you poof yourself worthy just like Thor but as a Writer keep it up, lets see if you can find a Easter egg in this comment good luck finding it if you find it say it in my Quickee, though a great chapter the action fight was so cool! keep it up :)

nice chapter keep it up :) really loving the story another great chapter from a great author, keep it up :)

keep it up i read Chapter 2 sorry for the late comment on this chapter though i had to complete THE KILLER story so i couldn't read your story now THE KILLER has been completed now i can read your story peacefully , keep it up great chapter :)

Wow! This seems like a great story. I'll be shelving this for later!

Another great chapter! I'm really enjoying the story. I see Danny really ins't happy about the whole being locked up thing. Aliens lol that made me laugh, I loved it.

I really enjoyed the chapter, and I'll be reading more soon :)

Okay, so I think I'm late for the criticism train but I still noticed some grammar errors. That's all the errors and now for praises.

I like the introduction, Necrosse's reaction when he was ejected had me laughing for some reason. I liked the plot you've come up and I'll be reading more. The race's name are really unique and it does sound like they're aliens. I really have nothing else to say, I'm like this at the beginning but I'll express more of my thoughts as I read on. :)

Another great chapter, Danny is a pretty cool character haha

Another awesome chapter! I really hope they can deal with those hellific people, I like the sound of them.

Another great chapter. I see straight away that Necrosse does not like this place already. I think he might catch up with and meet Danny, or I hope so haha I got a couple laughs in too - this was great! I'll be back to read more soon cx

Lol how cool would it be to have wings? This was an awesome chapter, the action was really well written, and I loved the fight, it was epic. Izzi is a sweet character, I think she may be my favourite haha I'll be back to read more soon cx

~Kathrina

Interesting chapter, its great to get an even greater introduction to the characters, and the descriptions were nicely done as well! Danny seems pretty cool, and so does Izzi. Now, a winged cat? That's certainly new for me haha but I kinda like it, and I can't wait to see where this goes. I'll be back to read more soon :)

Okay, this was really good. Excalibur is something that's usually used a lot in fantasy, and I was glad to see it pop up in your story, I do love it haha your background of it was very well written and thought out, I can see that you've put a lot of time into this and I appreciate that. I will for sure be back to read some more when i some time. In the mean time, keep up the good work!

This was a great start, I can see myself really liking this. I think this is going to be a really funny and action filled adventure, so of course I'll be back to read some more soon. This is one of the first sci-fi books I'm checking out, so its gonna be a whole new experience haha. I'm excited to see where it goes!

Hey!! i just started reading your story.. i will continue reading your story..it seems interesting...your writing style is good,keep up the good work. :)

I'm sorry it took so long for my review; I don't know what happened, since I posted it after reading the forum post. I guess my computer must have failed to post it. So very sorry. I have nothing bad to say about this book. I love all the description of it, and I could clearly picture everything. It felt like I was part of the story. Even though it is clearly fiction, everything about it was very intriguing and it seemed real. I knew it wasn't, but something about it seemed plausible. I love how you added a lot of dialogue, but didn't overdo it, since I am very afraid to do that because I always underdo it or overdo it. This was really good and I can't wait to read the next chapter. (About to read it now.) Sorry again, I have no idea what happened, since I posted this right after the forum post. Stupid computer. I also feel like the characters are really good and I want to learn more about them!

Shada got most of it... I notated one thing for you though!