May I ?

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Young Adult  |  House: Booksie Classic

I spend every waking moment thinking Of you.. Counting down the Hours until I can be with You again ... I love You

may I hold your hand n lead the dance

Take u to the dance floor n have a chance

Dance to my heartbeat let me dance to yours

Let's slam behind our backs sadness doors

Let's dance on the moon let's wish on a star

Not caring if we were near or far

Shine on me n let me make a wish on u

Let's do what no one else can do

How about we lie down on the moons beach

Let's fly and get as far as our dreams can reach

Let's break all laws...lets create our own shows

they started with Romeo n Juliet

Let it be u n i let it be fate

Wouldn't be just great

let's raise love n kill hate

let's write on the carpet of the sky

up in the wide universe up so high

write our legacy write our name

your name and mine with a heart as a frame

being up on the moon made the sun look so dark

to the whole world u were the spark

the spark that was responsible for everything beautiful

for every sentence of love that is so meaningful

let's draw a line in-between them blinking stars n see

what they want us to be

what would the picture turn out

us hugging one another with heaven's layout

i believe in god

and god has given me u

i should be grateful and hold on to you

make me smile I'll make u smile

make me happy I'll make u happy

make me cry I'll just simply die


Submitted: October 19, 2009

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Mistress of Word Play

This is very beautiful. I am sure the person you wrote it for will love it. The flow, rhythm, and form are excellent.
A pleasure to read such a delightful piece.

Mon, October 19th, 2009 7:48pm


she enjoyed reading it , i wrote May I before 7 months, I were happy because she came back she was away for three years ,,, but noting is perfect she engaged and married after 2 months ... i lived in pain for three years waiting for here .. and i get sorrow and pain the end ....

Mon, October 19th, 2009 1:29pm



This was truly really quite heart felt and extremely emotional. Its something everyone can relate to as we've all been there, and will be there again and again. I like your simple rhyming scheme, and the mood conveyed in your poem. One thing though, don't write "u" instead of you, as this is not texting. It would make your poem look and feel much better, and would not mislead your reader to think of something else, or an unfinished word.

Fri, December 11th, 2009 3:16am


thank you :)

Tue, December 15th, 2009 12:38am



Wow! I was simply blown away, it is such a beautiful poem! What inspired you to write a poem which gives me shivers even now?

Sat, December 26th, 2009 12:57pm



thank you for the comment and welcome to booksie and i hope you will enjoy it here :)

Sat, December 26th, 2009 8:26pm



the poem is nice. but i am thinking about the english. i mean use of letters like 'n' instead of words. isn't it harming the language? just an opinion.

Sat, March 20th, 2010 9:31am

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