Ashes Divide

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic

A short symbolic story based on my experience...

I can hear the unsounded. I can see it coming. I can feel it escaping like air from my lungs. Like a volcano it is just so unknown when will I erupt; or will I ever erupt? The faster I run towards it; the slower the time gets, creating no difference no matter what I do. I can feel it burning in time, I can see the light, I can see people astonished by the emitted lights. The vibration under my feet and the brisk pace of my heart; that divides me somewhere in between the uncertain but a solitary feeling. Those messages on the ashes; those voices from the tears, they always warned me for going back; when those decisions were written with a feather from my body and then I was thrown away. I don't want to loose this moment. I don't and I can't... I can see the last few blurry sights, smell the perfume, hear the vibrant screams. Always asking myself a question that will I ever make it? I still try to reach there, with a broken spine, bleeding feet, and the chilled breath. With each increasing step towards it I can see the rain of ashes getting dense, I can now feel what have I lost.

The tender air spreading it all over, the red and blue lights flashing in my eyes. The vestiges, the escaped, the unsaid, and my world of phantasm; it all disappeared, leaving few of its fragile memories behind. A long pause ceased me for few moments... Its a wait; a silent anticipation of the unknown...

Submitted: January 10, 2009

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Very thoughtful and nicely written piece. I really feel you could add to this and take it much further. I sure hope you do.

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Welcome to booksie ^i^

Sat, January 10th, 2009 6:17pm


wow, i can just picture this in my mind =D nice work ^_^ if you have time, maybe you could read my novel (marc of the damned) we kind of have a similar writing voice (at least i think so xD)
see ya around!

Sat, January 10th, 2009 6:51pm


very well writeen, excellent expression :)

Sun, January 11th, 2009 12:48pm

Moon Child

I loved it!! Emotions were bursting out of the writing. Good job!

Sun, January 11th, 2009 5:28pm


Nice well written short pieces are my favorite - Well done

Fri, January 16th, 2009 5:03pm

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