Darkness and Light

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

My mind wandered and I found the beginnings and the eventual creation of this poem. I just jotted down the lines and fixed it up.

You saw me there, standing tall

Fighting the darkness, fighting the call

Yet you stood there and watched through time

As the battle wore on, passed midnight’s chime

*

I kept fighting, through hurt and pain

And still you just watched and waited till I was slain

You didn’t help, you didn’t cry

When finally at last, it was my turn to die

*

The killing shot was a coward’s blow

But then you always were, I always did know

You promised love, you promised me light

Instead you gave me my darkest night

*

You stood and watched while I died

And not a single tear you cried

How dare you lie to me and I couldn’t tell

I hope you burn forever in Hell

*

You said you’d changed, seen the light

That you turned against evil and joined our fight

But you lied, you terrible snake

I’ll never mend this heart you break

*

Just leave me, I don’t want to see

Your face, cruelly sneering at me

I’ll die here all alone, and you’ll walk away

I hope you regret this in the coming day


Submitted: May 28, 2010

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Brian W

A really good poem with good flow and rhyme I enjoyed the read and read it twice.. This line
"But then you always were, I (?) always (?) know" maybe add a "did" in it in where I put the (?) it may sound better but my english is lousy

Sat, July 10th, 2010 2:41pm

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thank you, it was great to point that out. I'm glad you liked it so much.

Sat, July 10th, 2010 10:15am

Dixie Lee

This was an extremely good poem. The content was excellent, as was the flow. I feel like, in a way, the reader can connect with the victem in the poem. To have someone you love betray you, it is the worst way to die. I also like how the reader can take the meaning of the poem two different ways. It can mean the literal way, with the victem and the killer fighting in a duel to the death. However is can also be parallel to a lover finding that his/her spouse/lover cheated on him/her. It was a very emotional poem, and I loved every bit of it. It was great, and I hope you write more.

-Dixie

Wed, February 2nd, 2011 10:31am

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Thank you. I did always love the story in this poem, I think because betrayal is something I rarely write but as for the meaning well as you said it's for the reader to decide what is happening to the 'writer'. Personally I believe it's a bit of both.

Wed, February 2nd, 2011 4:49pm

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