Vampire promises

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Fantasy  |  House: Booksie Classic

Title explains all!

Lover:

I see your silhouette, The curtain falls

I see your face, its my blood that calls

But you will endure

Always wishing for a cure

Lover:

Becuase of me you found your heart

So do we now part

Before you answer think on this

You and me and eternal bliss

Lover:

Drink from me and i from you

For you there's nothing i won't do

I'll set you free

In the arms of immortality 

Vampire:

Do not ask of me what i cannot give

I will not let you die so i can live

Remeber those you leave behind

Do you think leaving them is truly kind

Vampire:

No my love, i will not try

Cursing you, i'd rather die

I'll always be here

You do not have to fear.

Vampire:

I'll keep you in my arms embrace

Free from the suffering do many face

I'll love you forever

Impossible you say but never say never

For this is the only reason i will keep existing

You will be safe as long as i keep resisting

Our memories will keep us alive

It will save us from hell's firey dive


Submitted: June 29, 2009

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Brian W

Wow your poems always impress me. Great flow and rhyme and I like how you got a poem from a conversation and a love poem at that.
Now critical comments :-) Near the beginning is one spelling mistake "Because" and this line "Free from the suffering do many face" "many do face" to me sounds better BUT I failed at english so I am most likely wrong. That is it. Your poem is near perfect and I hope to write poems this good one day.
My appologises if I offended you.

Mon, June 29th, 2009 10:26pm

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no offece taken. Thanx, i definatly didn't spot them, your a big help, though i doubt i'll get around to changing them.

Mon, June 29th, 2009 4:57pm

MissChildish

Another wonderful poem M.C! Very interesting conversation...I'm still annoyed you can even write a poem let alone make one into a conversation! But Well Done anyway, ^_^

Wed, July 1st, 2009 7:48am

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thanx liz and trust me i never knew i could write poems till last year when we had to an assignment on them and right now i'm still experimenting and thanx from enjoying it.

Wed, July 1st, 2009 12:59am

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