A very sad story

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Status: In Progress  |  Genre: Young Adult  |  House: Booksie Classic

It's going to take me awhile to finish this it was just a draft
Special thx to Ms.Cassidy & Bloodystrawberries
This is all fake but it can happen.

 My name is Elizabeth,but most people call me Lizzy.I'm 16 years old and I had a boyfriend.For some reason he committed suicide.I don't know why he'd do that.He always told me that he's had an awesome life,but I'll get to that part later on.

 Today is my first day of highschool.It was the first day I met some of my friends.They were so nice too me.It was even the first time i met Robin.My friends told me all about their summer,and i told them all about my summer after the first day of school ended.I ended up being the smartest kid in class,for example,I knew what the answer was for a very hard answer.I always had A's i never had B's,C's,or D's.Everybody else got B's and C's,but some of the other kids make D's and F's which it was sad for me.I tought those kids,who got lower grades than me,how to answer questions and ect. 

A few months passed by very quickly my friends and I have been able to get a cool table at the school and i'd help them once they ask for the help.I was always glad to help out my friends.Most of my friends KO themselves because they were being bullied and they didn't tell me about it.My guess is that they didn't want me to get bullied,but they didn't want me to know. 


Submitted: December 12, 2013

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James Collins

I really don't think you need to have different color text with different backgrounds. The standard black on white is usually most easiest to read.
With that said, you need to do much more building and expanding upon your story. It's short and doesn't really capture the idea (whatever it is) that needs to be put across. You need to outline your stories and make sure you have a definite plot. Unlike the other commenter, I don't really see a plot yet. It just needs work.

Wed, December 18th, 2013 7:49pm

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I understand that.It's just that I got bored and i type random stuff.

Wed, December 18th, 2013 7:24pm

Vamparah

Did this really happen to? i really hope not. its alright so far just fix some errors and make it a little longer amd leave a cliff hanger for pwople to come back and want moee.

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:28am

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It almost happened,but people helped talk each other out of it but i didn't realize it till a few weeks ago. I'm rewriting it right now so it might be up after I finish my Lost Anna story.

Thu, February 20th, 2014 1:53pm

Vamparah

*and
*people
*more
Gosh sorry I was typing so fast I have too many errors. Oh and also change the title! It sounds childish and a little lame (sorry) I suggest (Suicide Silence) or (Pain in my heart) I don't know something you'll think would catch the readers eye

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:33am

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its alright :D thx for reading

Thu, February 20th, 2014 1:50pm

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