torn apart.

Tear drops on my window pane,

Causing all this emotional pain,

Seeing you hold her hand as you walk by,

Makes me want to cry,

Holding on to the joyful memories we had,

Still makes me sad,

Having all this pain instilled inside me,

Is it true everyone can still see?

I'm the same on the outside,

But, on the inside I'm torn to pieces,

I don't need a smypathy line to put me back to part,

But, I'm begging you please don't let this pain start,

Streams of tears roll down my face,

Acting like they are in a race,

Storms will pass to making a new beginning in our lives,

But, you are special, you are what my life strives,

You've created a hole,

That is taking over my entire human soul!

Submitted: January 02, 2011

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Lynn Grey

This was really good :)) I loved it!

Tue, January 4th, 2011 12:30pm


Thank yooou sooo much, I really love the feedback from you guy's, even though I'm new hahha.

Tue, January 4th, 2011 10:15am


Beautiful piece, I loved it! You wrote it so well, with such great emotion. Keep up the good working, I'd love to read more! ;)

Sun, January 16th, 2011 1:36am


Thank yooou :) Plenty more to read XD

Sun, January 16th, 2011 10:35am


I don't know much about poetry, but I think it's pretty good! I liked it :D It was so... right, you know :) The lines didn't sound awkward or forced (which mine do, when I have to write a poem for school -.-) Great job! xx Paige

Sat, January 29th, 2011 10:20am


Hahaha, thankk you so much, dear.

Sat, January 29th, 2011 3:59am

jacky franco

i LOved it
*i could relate to it*

Sat, January 29th, 2011 2:44pm


Thank you, my heart was torn..... /:

Sat, January 29th, 2011 10:01am


I can see so much imagery. It's great! LoVe It!!

Mon, January 31st, 2011 7:11pm


Thanks, dear.

Tue, February 1st, 2011 2:03pm


you do pretty good, i havnt read one i didnt enjoy yet

Sun, March 20th, 2011 8:26pm


xD thank you. :) hehe, updates?

Mon, March 21st, 2011 2:21pm

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