Too Big for this World

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Flash Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is a very short story written for a contest. Lol I've never tried to write something under 500 words before :)
Anyway the result is a ambiguous burst of emotion that I hope will touch someone.
Enjoy!

I am constantly being looked down upon. I rushed down the hallway, three textbooks in hand. I staggered from the weight. No one offered to help me. Most averted their eyes, although they have seen me before.  I felt like a dead sapling in the middle of a field of cherry blossoms in spring. They will grow, shed their flowers and be reborn anew. I was dead.  Stuck. In second grade I started to look different. People started judging me. They ripped off the leaves that made me strong. That had protected me. They killed who I was inside. With every insult, every snicker, every embarrassed glance, a leaf fell the ground blackened, never to grow again. I was a shell of who I had once been. Devoid of hope.

I sharp stinging on my back brought me out of my trance. He didn’t mean it I thought. The cool steel of the locker brought me to my senses. Who was I kidding? When had someone not meant it? Even to the nice ones I was not someone to befriend. I was never thought of as an equal. I was just someone to feel sorry for. I rested there in thought until the bell rang. Only then was it safe for me to retrieve my textbooks from the once deadly river. I had been trampled before. My hands trembled as I picked up the third. It slid to the side and I wasn’t able to hold on. I wasn’t able to keep my balance; I fell, head in my lap, textbooks beside me. I lay there crying for the longest time. If anyone else noticed they didn’t seem to care. I stood up tall. This time I wouldn’t fail.

I was methodical in my work. I first stacked the books on top of each other, making sure the edges aligned. I then bent my knees and firmly placed my hands beneath them. With a grunt I lifted them up. I few moments later I reached the Promised Land. The Library. I sat down in the comfiest armchair I could find and listened to the final bell of the year ring.

Hurray! Now I get to spend the rest of the summer pretending I have something to life for.

No!  I didn’t have to succumb. I would rise taller than the greatest oak. I wouldn’t let anyone look down on me again. The smallest sapling germinates to the tallest tree.  The world had nothing left for me. I had grown out of it. Broke through its outer constraining atmosphere of social hierarchies. I looked down on humanity, for judging, for not loving. I floated into the clouds and rose higher than my bullies had ever been. For the first time in my life a smile lingered on my lips. I was free.

I was gone.


Submitted: June 11, 2013

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BrittanyJacksonPaz

I enjoyed this. It was poetic in a sense and inspiring! :)

Tue, June 11th, 2013 4:39pm

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Thank you! I like to think of myself as a poetic person although
I'm inept at actually writing poetry :)
It is actually about a girl with achondroplasia who ends up killing her self. She rises to heaven and finally feels taller than everyone else. You probably already figured that out, but I guess it could be inspiring, but to me it was just sad...

Tue, June 11th, 2013 11:37pm

smircle

I like how there is no dialogue in this; we hear things from her mind and it makes it more powerful that way. Like the comment above me said, it is rather poetic; and inspiring. I like it :)

Tue, June 11th, 2013 6:12pm

Author
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Thank you! For some reason I find dialogue a lot harder to write because it always comes out feeling a little fake to me... Any thoughts/advice on how to fix that?

Tue, June 11th, 2013 11:38pm

Insane Membrane

interesting but sad read ...

I think you need to check some grammar also not that I am any better but yanno ...

Wed, June 12th, 2013 8:44am

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Thanks for the feedback! Lol I know I have a plethora of sentence fragments and I think even once sentence where I switch to present tense, but I mean it is someones thoughts. I know that when I think it is defiantly not linear.

Thu, June 13th, 2013 2:34pm

animefreak77L

I've got shivers, this was amazingly written.i really enjoyed reading this. The story itself is so simply but you can feel all that's she's feeling, your writing style just sucked me in. I love how at the end she finally sees herself above the others, she finally gets what she hoped for. Now I'm just ranting lol sorry I just enjoyed it.

Wed, June 12th, 2013 9:49am

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Wow thank you! I'm glad that so many people really enjoyed this...

Thu, June 13th, 2013 2:31pm

AbstractKash

you have a way with words ^_^ uniquely written though I am kinda confused about the ending.

Wed, June 12th, 2013 2:29pm

Author
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Thank you! Oh well she commits suicide and is lifted to heaven where she is finally taller than her peers. It's depressing, I know, but I think she finally finds peace.

Thu, June 13th, 2013 2:28pm

Take the World by Fire

This was a ohenominal and powerful short story! And gripping as well! I cant imagine living such a sad life and so so alone. Even tho the ending was sad, in a way there is some peace in knowing they were taken to a better place! Great work XD

Wed, June 12th, 2013 2:57pm

Author
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Thank you so much! I really wanted it to end happily, but if I was living the life they were, I don't think I would be able to find peace any other way.

Thu, June 13th, 2013 2:26pm

NobleStarAisha

Such a nice short story. Deep in emotions. The last day of school and he being happy as if he just got out of jail after a year of imprisonment, the emotions are perfectly depicted. And I loved your choice of words. Nice One!!!

Wed, June 12th, 2013 3:25pm

Author
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Yay thank you :) I'm glad you liked it :)

Thu, June 13th, 2013 2:24pm

SamSass531

This is really deep and great writing. It really makes you think a little and the metaphors are beautifully executed. I really enjoyed it.

Wed, June 12th, 2013 5:56pm

Author
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Yay I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for reading :P

Thu, June 13th, 2013 2:21pm

Sixella Malz

A beautiful story with so many emotions. Lovely writing and a great read (:

Thu, June 13th, 2013 2:14am

Author
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Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it :)

Thu, June 13th, 2013 2:14pm

ErinBlaze

I really enjoyed this, I think we've all had that moment in life and we just worked right through it. Keep on writing :)

Fri, June 14th, 2013 7:57pm

Smilyface3364

Loved the fig lang in the first paragraph and the way you described how you were dead, I totally related! Kids are cruel!

Fri, June 14th, 2013 9:16pm

Mikey CD

oh, you poor girl. enjoy your freedom, and rise up to every obstacle. that is the advice i give you. hope it's heeded.

Sat, June 15th, 2013 10:32am

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Thank you? Lol in this case this story didn't personally apply to me. Considering the girls kills her self at the end...

Sat, June 15th, 2013 2:30pm

Mikey CD

doesn't mean it doesn't apply to some other people who might be reading this, right?

Sat, June 15th, 2013 11:30pm

El Steveo

Hey there, you asked me to read something.

This is very well written, it flows well. Great metaphors too, they had some colour to the little story. I think there was one perhaps one minor grammar error, but that doesn't detract from the quality of the writing at all. You should upload something longer, this was good. Well done!

Sun, June 16th, 2013 6:41am

Author
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Thank you I'm glad you liked it! Haha I'm sure there was more than one. I did this really quickly for a contest and didn't know how to edit it once I uploaded it :)

Sun, June 16th, 2013 10:48am

Lady Cataluna

It's well written. I'm excited to read the rest of your work.

Tue, June 18th, 2013 3:34am

Brightone

very beautiful written. i was caught in it instantly :-) very well done

Tue, June 18th, 2013 6:55am

twerty101

pretty amazing! I like how it goes, so..... amazing! :D

Tue, June 25th, 2013 4:19pm

KathyLiD

Ah, this was well written, almost poetic and most certainly beautiful. I love the tree metaphor, to stand as tall as a tree! Really nice descriptions too. Kathy :)

Mon, July 1st, 2013 4:27pm

Author
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Thank you so much!! I'm glad you liked it :)

Mon, July 1st, 2013 9:48am

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