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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Horror  |  House: Booksie Classic

Lauren Kingsley comes home from school one day to find an unfortunate visitor...


I sighed of relief as the final bell rang.

“Yes!” criedKara. The other students rushed out of the classroom like a herd of buffalos.

“Is it awesome or what?” Kara asked me as we strolled quickly to our lockers to retrieve the rest of our things.

“More than awesome,” I replied happily. “It rules.”

She pulled her backpack out of her locker. “You wanna celebrate tonight?” she suggested. “I’ll get a hold of Christine andHeather and maybe we can go to the arcade.”

I nodded. “That’d be fun. I’ll tell Emma, too.”


We walked down the front steps of the school. The bright sun shone down mercilessly, and the air was hot. I was happy that we’d finally be away from those stuffy classrooms for a while.

“See you later,” I called to her as she boarded her bus. She waved to me and climbed aboard. I quickly hopped onto my 10 speed bike and pedaled all the way out of the parking lot.

God, I hope tonight’ll be fun, I thought. I wish my life wasn’t so freaking boring.

I pulled into my driveway and put my bike into the garage. To my surprise, the mail was on the front step. “That’s weird,” I said. “I thought Mom would have brought it in by now.”

I scooped the mail up as I walked inside my house.

It was really quiet, to my surprise. Normally, I’d here the TV or something, but it was completely silent. “Mom?” I called.

No answer.

I walked out into the living room to see if she was taking a nap or something.

I let out a cry.

On the ground of my living room was a weird woman. She had long, messy, sickly-colored blond hair that reached her waist. She was extremely thin, and had skinny legs and pointy fingernails.

She got up from the ground and stared at me. She had beady green eyes with no pupils, lots of wrinkles, and large red lips. The lips then curled into a smile.

“Hello, Lauren,” she hissed at me.

My blood turned to ice, my heart stopped dead in its tracks, and my hands began to tremble violently. “W--Who are you?” I whimpered.

The creature lurched forward a few steps. “What? You don’t recognize your own mother?” it asked.

I gasped in shock. I wanted to run, but my legs wouldn’t move. It was like they were cemented there.

“What’s wrong, Lauren?” the monster said in a slithery voice. I narrowed my eyes and swallowed the lump in my throat. “ . . . Mom . . . ?” I choked out.

The creature was absolutely terrifying. It was like a monster from a Steven King novel. It was creeping toward me slowly.

I finally got control of my legs back. Without even thinking, I turned around and began to run out the door.

Something grabbed my foot as I ran and pulled me back. I was then suddenly upside down. It took me a minute to realize that the monster was holding me upside down.

“Where are you going, honey?” it purred. “Don’t be afraid . . .”

“Let go of me!” I yelled. “You are not my mother!”

It growled. “You don’t talk to your mother like that!” She held up one of her long, razor-like claws. “Looks like you will have to get punished . . .”

My eyes widened in fear. “W-Wha—?”

Grinning, she jabbed her index finger into my stomach.

Blood started gushing out immediately. I screamed in agony. She pulled her finger out, it stained with blood.

She dropped me on the ground. My vision began to get blurry. “Don’t worry,” she whispered, “this is for your own good. After all, a mother knows best . . .”


I sat up in my bed, my heart racing at the speed of light. My hands and face were sweaty, and I was shivering like crazy. I was in my room, under my covers, safe.

“Honey!” shouted a voice from outside my bedroom door, which was closed. “Wake up, it’s time for school! It’s your last day, remember?”

Submitted: March 14, 2009

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nice job :)

Mon, March 16th, 2009 11:30pm


Thanks! ^_^

Mon, March 16th, 2009 5:17pm


hey you are actually a really good writer, it was great...really freaky but great :)

Wed, March 18th, 2009 9:54pm


Wow, thanks! ^_^

Wed, March 18th, 2009 3:43pm


Wow That was pretty awsome ,liked the twist at the end, though its very typical of storys to end like that. but i liked It !


Thu, March 19th, 2009 4:19pm


Thanks so much! :D

Thu, March 19th, 2009 12:02pm


ooohh!! I wanrt more!
Update, update, update!
And let me know!

Tue, April 14th, 2009 10:20pm


Actually, I'm not continuing. XD This was just a short story. But thanks for the compliment! ^^

Tue, April 14th, 2009 7:00pm

Catherine Night

insanely creepy... cool... but creepy. nice job

Sun, April 19th, 2009 5:20am


XD Thanks. ^_^

Sun, April 19th, 2009 11:23am

to lie on the floor without holding on

Ah, I love this! Very Stephen King. Good job!

Thu, July 23rd, 2009 11:28pm


Haha thanks very much! ^_^

Thu, July 23rd, 2009 5:25pm


Liked it :) So I pressed like :) lol

Sat, July 25th, 2009 8:00pm


Haha wow, thanks! ^^

Sat, July 25th, 2009 4:49pm



Sun, July 26th, 2009 8:51am


Thanks. =D

Sun, July 26th, 2009 11:50am


It was little scary, but nice:)

Sun, July 26th, 2009 4:21pm


Haha thank you. ^^

Sun, July 26th, 2009 11:47am


Totally Freaky In Kewl, Weird Way.
Kinda Makes Yeh Wonder:
"Wow, What The Hell Was With That?"
Can I Ask What Made Yooh Write It?
Its Kinda Intriguing
Good Job Anyways :)
Fancy Checking OUt Some Of My Stuff If You Have Time?
Most Of It Is Pretty Uncompleted, But Updates Will Be Up Soon

Keep Up The Amazing Work :D



Sun, August 9th, 2009 6:34pm


Thanks! Lolz I wrote it for both a challenge and a thing for school. I let my friends read it and they were freaked out too. XD Sure, I'll check out your stuff soon! :D

Mon, August 10th, 2009 6:45pm


I thought this was reallyyy good!(:

Sun, August 30th, 2009 4:00pm


Thanks! ^_^

Mon, August 31st, 2009 8:54am


Awesome, i liked it :)

Fri, September 4th, 2009 5:55pm


Thanks! ^^

Fri, September 4th, 2009 12:09pm


That was really good! It flowed nicely and I didn't find any mistakes. Well done! =)

Sun, January 3rd, 2010 5:22pm


Haha thanks! :D

Sun, January 3rd, 2010 12:23pm


Wow! that was a very nice story indeed =) i really enjoyed reading it =)

Thu, May 20th, 2010 9:11am


Haha thanks! ^_^

Thu, May 20th, 2010 8:19am

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